Ok I like this paragraph format much better. It's more open and feels like your reading a book not an essay. And I do not believe I saw any typos. And finally they talked yay!!! Great story. I love it. Update soon. :)

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Ok I really like the story so far, but try to open up the paragraphs. They are very boxy. And some simple typos are in there as well. But great story. Really love it.

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I love the idea of the portrait. It was a good chapter, although a little short. I can't wait to see what happens with her new friend!

lOony

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Good chapter :D
I really like how it was from albus's point of view

lOony

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Wow.
What an intense chapter. I really like the way you've written it :D

Till next time
lOony

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Hi!
I think I'll like this story! Nothing has happened yet, but I like the way it started :) I'll just wait to see what happens.
By the way, I liked the idea of the portrait that guards their dorm. It's different from the usual password.
Keep updating!
Ines

Author's Response: Thank You, first because you are the first to review this story so you automatically become one of my favorite people on earth.
Second, I really hope you do like it, the first twelve chapters are done so as long as they keep getting validated it will continue to be updated.
Lastly, I'm glad you mentioned the portraits because I liked the idea of finally having something other than just a password to remember and I was hoping someone else would like it too.
Thank You Thank You Thank You,
Love,
The StoryWriter


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