Great update. Can't wait to read more. Report Review
Once again, a great chapter. Very interesting to read, quite generous and quite memorable. I do hope you will continue this story, as I think it has potential.
Perhaps focus a little more on describing setting and place? Your characterization of the Malfoys is quite strong and so is your dialogue, however, I do think you could make your story more vivid if you add a little description of Malfoy Manor and all the other places you will use.
Other than that, it's a wonderful story. Keep up the great work and I'm looking forward to reading more.
P.S. I can't remember if I gave you a 10/10 for the first chapter. If I didn't, then let me just say I meant to. :)
Merope :)xAuthor's Response: Hi there thanks so much for reading and giving such thoughtful reviews! I'm just working on the next chapter now so it should be up soon. Report Review
This is a very interesting idea and your writing style is quite good. I particularly think your dialogue is strong and the way you portray the Malfoys is very believable.
The idea you have with the Dark Lord allowing his Death Eaters to have only one child is rather interesting and I can totally see Volide imposing such a thing on his followers--it's puerly evil and the reasons are believable.
I've always been attracted to stories about "the other Malfoy" and I think you did a great job with this one.
Keep up the great work.
Merope :) Report Review
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