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Review #1, by ginerva_molly_weasley Together, Apart...

18th July 2012:
The first sentence with the repetition of back is just so powerful and drew me straight into the story immediately to make me intrigued to see what she wanted to go back from.

This is just so sad though. Ron leaving Hermione and them not getting back together. Its just something I'd never really thought about but still a truly fabulous story.

One crit I have though is with the huge amounts of italics in this. I know its for a flashback but maybe some line breaks could have worked to? The italics make my eyes go all jumbly but obviously that doesn't affect how amazing this work was.

I loved the flashback though. You wrote children on christmas day just so well! And trust me, 5 am is late for my family to be getting up, we'd be very lucky if they slept past 3. I also love the contrast between then and now, when they were all so happy but now Rose is just distraught at her dad leaving.

It also helps that you included the gift because then it intensifies the contrast with Hermione looking at it now. Looking at all Ron's good points makes this even more sad. Looking back on the past ;(


Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review!!
I have a habit of using repetition at odd times, so I'm glad it had a nice effect in this!!
Ooh, I never thought of doing it like that! I'll keep it in mind if I ever do something like this again!
And there was me thinking I got up early on Christmas ;) I average about 6am!
Aww, I'm glad you loved it!

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Review #2, by NaidatheRavenclaw Together, Apart...

5th September 2011:
Hey! Sorry it took me so long to get to your review, but here it is, as promised :D

I think you did a really great job at this! You managed to work the memory of Hugo's childhood into the main block of your story perfectly, and I love how it wasn't just all fluff and cuteness. You managed to bring a sorrow to it, that contrasted sharply with the lovely happiness in the middle, and the two together made your story amazing.

If I had any critique at all, it would be that I wish the memory focused a little more on Hugo, instead of Hugo and Rose. I completely understand the whole family thing, but I would have loved to hear some of Hugo's thoughts during the scene.

Overall though, I really liked this! Winners will be posted later today-keep an eye out for them ;)

Author's Response: No problem :D
Thank you!! :D
*facepalm* Why didn't I think of that? It's so obvious now! :P
Thanks again :D

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Review #3, by Catairly Together, Apart...

24th August 2011:
Aww, this is simply one of the sweetest and saddest one-shots I've ever read! I really, really enjoyed reading it! :D

I loved how you managed to capture Hugo's feelings perfectly and the memory description was also pretty great! Congrats on this one, Ams! :D

-Maria (:

Author's Response: Aww, thank you =D I'm glad that you liked it =D

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