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Review #1, by TidalDragon Looking For Her Brothers

7th July 2014:
Howdy!

Well that was short but intense. It's a different type of story from what you normally see on the archives, even in this genre. Possession certainly happens in canon and I don't think it's a stretch to believe it could happen via ghosts as well.

What is slightly strange about it in your story is that it happens on the Hogwarts Express. Presumably I would think the train would have all sorts of enchantments to ward off such spirits from taking root or even boarding. I know we have dementors on board in PoA, but those were permitted, so I figure there was probably some exception.

I would also say that at a certain point, things got a bit disjointed, switching back and forth between POVs and with everyone moving about. Perhaps with more words this would have come off as a little less jarring (or perhaps jarring is exactly what you wanted), but I think it's just something to consider.

Thanks for sharing!

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Review #2, by LunaLover Looking For Her Brothers

18th September 2011:
I love it! Silly Little Lily...that's awesome stuff. You should expand on this it would be cool.

Author's Response: Thanks so much!I've been thinking about expanding.

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Review #3, by Tonks101 Looking For Her Brothers

24th August 2011:
Hahahahaha creepiness! Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

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Review #4, by flufff Looking For Her Brothers

23rd August 2011:
Woah! That was really interesting. I mean, I didn't expect it to be all creepy like that, but I really liked it. You have skillage, and I especially liked that part where she's there, and she says "Everything gets worse before it gets better." I think that was cool. Anyways, great job. I think you're an amazing writer! ;D

Keep writing~ flufff

Also... if you ever have some extra time, could you R&R my fanfic "Darkest Night"? I would really appreciate it! Thank youu! ;D

Author's Response: Oh thank you SO much. it means a lot! I've never thought of myself as a good writer, but if I have skillage, I like that word it's fun to say, I'll keep writing!

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