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Review #1, by HPPC Staff Phoenix Fire

14th November 2012:
Hey there! Iím here to leave you one of the reviews you won for placing in the HPPC writing challenge.

Aww no song? :P I was just getting used to the songfic style you use, but your narrative is beautifully written as always.

Oh I see what you did there! Keeping the characters unnamed until the very end is such a tease! I didnít know who the pairing was but looking back on it I LOVE the fact that it was Remus and Sirius. I donít normally pair them together, but this was a believable moment for them and the emotion really came through.

I love that you use the word Ďweí a lot. It emphasizes their bond and makes the story that much more connected to the central plot. ĎWe are no longer Remus and Sirius. We are one, together, forever.í LOVED that ending line. So beautiful and so fitting for an ending.

I loved the passion at the beginning and wasnít really expecting it from the tone of the other stories. But then again I donít expect every story you write to be a sad one. I really liked this lust filled secretive love plot and itís such a contrast from the sweet and innocent love stories.

Wonderfully brilliant.
HPPC Staff

Author's Response: Sorry about no song! :P
Yeah, I really like having people wondering who it is and stuff;P
Yeah, I absolutely love them together, I really believe that they are meant for each other.
I did believe that they are bonded very well, and very connected.
Goodness, I am so glad that you liked my last line, and that you thought it was beautiful!
I am so glad you liked this, because it was really different than I have ever written!
Thank you so much for the sweet review(:


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Review #2, by DracoFerret11 Phoenix Fire

21st August 2011:
Hey Sarah! It's DarkRose from the forums that set the challenge. :]

You did a really good job! I enjoyed reading your story--I thought it was very well-written and the characters seemed very plausible.

The only thing I might suggest you change would be to add a bit more depth to Remus's thoughts. They seem a bit one-dimensional which takes from the quality of what I think could be a terrific story.

Maybe a bit more length would help you. :]

Great job, thank you for participating! The winners will be announced after the challenge ends!

--Emily (DarkRose)

Author's Response: Hello! (:
Alright, I may add more thought into what Remus is thinking.
Thank you so much (:


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Review #3, by Lisa Phoenix Fire

19th August 2011:
Hi! I really like it. This coupling is one of my favourites. Apart from the twins they are my favourite characters and I love Tonks but I think they should have been together. I think you should write another...just make it a bit longer 'cause you're good at it!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much.
They are one of my favorite ships as well (:
Thanks a lot, I really love reviews (:


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