It's a little confusing with the present and the past switching all the time but I get the tension you tried to create. It's well written and really pin-points the feeling of loss and love at such a tumuldous moment... if you get my drift.
I'm a big Ron/Hermione fan and shower everything related to them, that is canon, with praise but you're piece really get's the subtlety of their relation.
I think you get what i'm saying... I like it, a lot! Report Review
This is really, really lovely. The time switches work so well and make Hermione's feelings so immediate. Beautiful writing!Author's Response: thank you! Report Review
That is a difficult style of writing to pull off and you did it brilliantly! It had me wondering if Hermione was older and Ron had passed for a while, I like how you worked Rose in, too. It gave the sense that even after the war had long ago ended Hermione still feared for her loved ones. Well done!Author's Response: I'm happy you think so! I really felt like experimenting, and it really was difficult. Yeah, you got it right. Hermione was indeed older and Ron had passed. I think that was another reason why it was difficult writing this piece, really made me sad, to be honest. Anyway, thank you! :D Report Review
That was really beautifully written. The description was fantastic, and it's very, well, cautiously written, almost quietly if you know what I mean. Like you're watching a silent black and white movie or something. Sorry, I'm getting all emotional... :) Anyways, good job with this. I think it was great.
I'd really appreciate it if you would r&r my fanfic "Darkest Night"... you seem like an experienced writer, and... well, it's only if you want to. :) Thank you!Author's Response: Thank you so much for this kind review!
As soon as I have some spare time on my hands, I'll read it :) Report Review
Wooow! This was an amazing story! I loved the way you played around with time, though I do hope Hermione's not going crazy. Anyways, the ending gave me that Inception feeling - that the situation could be read in more than one way. I liked the feeling.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
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