This was such a beautiful story. It broke my heart. I could feel Cedric's emotions so strongly. The way you described his death was very realistic - the weightless unsubstantial feeling. I also liked the idea of the sailboat.
Cedric's eternal love for Rachel broke my heart. It was really written so wonderfully. And I liked how Rachel did not forget him either, and took her daughter to his grave. The snitch necklace idea was also beautiful.
All in all, I really liked this story. The narrative was smooth, the pace and the plot were well woven. The characterization of Cedric was very sweet too.
~Slytherin for the Cup 2012~Author's Response: Thanks very much! ^^ Report Review
Wow this was a beautifully written oneshot about tenthweasley's characters. The thoughts that Cedric had throughout the oneshot were so bittersweet because he was happy for her but at the same time sad that he couldn't be there.
Your style of writing was truly beautiful for this piece it just had this calm about it for me that just really made me feel his emotions! It all flowed so well together even though this piece took part over many years and it didn't feel cluttered or like too much at any point in time. I think you covered a great amount of detail in this oneshot and it was all done wonderfully.
As I have read a bit of Leaping Obstacles I'm not sure how well I can comment on if it makes sense to those who haven't read it though to me I feel that it does make sense and I haven't finished the story yet. I think that because its a oneshot not a lot of detail is needed on Rachel and that most should just be able to accept her as an OC.
Again this was so wonderfully written! It was really beautiful to read and an interesting take on life after death sort of thing. Great Job!
~Slytherinchica08~Author's Response: Oh, wow! Thank you for such a lovely review! I'm so flattered! And at the same time relieved that it makes sense, and I'm really happy that you liked it. Thanks again. I don't really know how to reply to such a wonderful review!
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Hello! I'm here from the forum with your review. Sorry it took so long.
I think you have a very expressive, beautiful piece here. There's a lot here that is touching. I loved Cedric's feelings, which seemed very real for someone who was dead. Especially the bitterness and jealousy that tinged him as Rachel got on with her life. That was very realistic and very heartbreaking.
The only place there was a disconnect for me was the fact that I knew nothing about Rachel. Because she's not a canon character, and it's not a canon character, I didn't know why he loved her, and because of that I couldn't quite get into the emotions the way I wanted to. I didn't know how they fell in love, why they were in love, or anything. It felt like it could have been any character at all there at the end. And I don't think that's what you want. So I wanted more background on the couple, somehow.
I loved your description, and I loved how you imagined the next life. It was a twist on a firm, good image. I also thought the snitch necklace was very unique. The little gems in your story really made it what it was. I thought the pacing was good as well.
I hoped I helped you out some! Thanks for requesting the review!Author's Response: Awh, thank you for such a kind review! I'm glad you thought it realistic and nicely done. I think I basically agree with you about the OC thing. That is done because it's based on a pre-existing fanfiction. I was tempted slightly to change the OC to Cho because we know a little bit more about her. It's given me something to think about anyway.
I'm glad you liked the afterlife thing- I figured since Harry's afterlife looked like Kings Cross, Cedrics would look like the lake at the bottom of his garden! It's just what I imagened, lol.
Thank you again. It was quite helpful, actually. ^_^ Report Review
Hello there! I'm finally coming by with your review -- it's long overdue, and I apologize most sincerely for that. Time slipped away from me and I couldn't believe it when I remembered I still hadn't left you your deserved review!
This was absolutely, completely, unequivocally, unquestionably, and totally adorable, and I enjoyed every word of it from start to finish. I really commend you for being brave enough to tackle my OC in your piece, and it was incredibly, incredibly fun for me to read about her and Cedric through someone else's eyes. I've been mourning their loss for a while and you've given me a ray of hope, as it were. :D
So cute, and thank you so much for writing it! I enjoyed it so much. :)Author's Response: Thankyou! I thought I'd give it a go since I like a challenge, and I'm reasonably pleased with how it turned out and I'm glad you liked it! :) Report Review
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