Why not indeed. Hey there, acrules coming to review your entry for my challenge.
I LOVED this. You say you've seen ideas similar, but I certainly hadn't and I was awed by the orginality of the idea. Even if its not orginal, I still thought it was genious.
I loved the how half of it was in ittalics. I know that sounds stupid but I really thought that it added sometihng... and the description of the sport seemed so real that I'm almost convinced that you play it yourself. Do you? You probably shouldn't if you do.
Anyway, thought-provoking, yes yes yes! A great entry :)Author's Response: Hey there! Glad you thought it was so good! I also thought the italics added something, sort of a disconnect between the two stories being told, in a way. I toyed with several structuring/styling methods for the story and eventually settled on that one... good to know it was effective :)
As for playing the sport, no :P I've never jumped from a cliff. I have had some experience with the feeling of emptiness that I hope this story managed to convey, however -- like you're just living for the next high. Fortunately, I think I'm past those feelings now, though. They say you have to suffer to write effectively, and I don't know how true that is, but I always feel like I can express those type of ideas better having had those experiences in the past.
I'm sort of relieved you thought it was thought-provoking -- that was my concern with it, as it was fairly short.
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Hi, I have to say I absolutely love this. Your writing style is refreshing, and the idea is really cool. The description is also amazing (I'm kind of low on vocabulary right now :) )
I love this line right here, it's kind of chilling to think he'd purposefully neglect to cast the shield.
...that moment just this side of the point of no return, he always hesitated -- tempted by the promise of oblivion.
Great job :)Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I like to experiment a bit with writing style -- it seems it paid off, judging by your reaction.
Yeah, Harry's definitely in a dark place in this story. I was kind of going for that 'chilling' feeling, so it's good to know I succeeded :)
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It was thought provoking and I enjoyed it immensely. Strange idea, but somehow it works. Great story!Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Yeah, I myself thought it was rather odd, but it wouldn't let go of me until I wrote it :P I think it turned out pretty well, though. Thanks for your review! Report Review
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