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Review #1, by Rose Her first Puzzle Piece

17th June 2013:
Hi- I really like your idea so far, I hope you don't mind a bit of criticism.
In the first paragraph, you say Lira's name too much that it breaks up the flow of the ideas and action, if you explained what was going on a bit more clearly it would make a bit more sense.
I think you meant gnome* in the last paragraph.
Perhaps give the reader more information about how Lira and Draco "got to know each other" and why they didn't know each other better before if they were in the same year and same house. It would help to understand their characters better through conversation between them and would pull your reader into the story.
Just suggestions of course. xxx
Overall I like your style and your characters have great potential. Keep it up :)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review. I'm actually glad you caught all that because I started this a few years ago and wasn't very good at all! I'm getting ready for a bit of reconstruction soon! Thanks again!

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Review #2, by marygold Son of A Witch!

13th November 2011:
Love the story!!! Hope to read more soon :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I recent just added more chapters, and I hope to finish it soon! Thank you so much for reading!

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Review #3, by Libby Her first Puzzle Piece

18th August 2011:
Good job. I can't wait to finish it :)

Author's Response: Thank you! :)

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Review #4, by Tweety Her first Puzzle Piece

13th August 2011:
I like it, there were a few spelling errors but they don't effect story :)
I'm intrested to see how this progresses :)
One mistake I did notice was at the beginning, you said Lira sat up but then mentioned her laying down, just a small thing but I thought I'd tell you :) But I really like it

Author's Response: Thank you!! And thank you for catching that, too! I'm glad you enjoyed it, as well! Much appreciated! :)

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