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Review #1, by purplepotter77 but of course not

16th July 2013:
I love your characterization of Peter. He's usually not written about (and certainly not in first person) with such depth of character, but you really pulled it off here! Lily/Peter is such a strange pairing, and I can't say I've ever read a fic with it before, but it just fits so well here. I've read a Sirius/Lily fic once, and it was so strange, because I don't think Sirius would ever do something like that to James, but I think Peter would, especially with betray ing them to Voldemort later on.

Peter somehow reminds me of Severus in a way, because they both love Lily, but she doesn't love them back, and they then end up working for the Dark Lord at some point in their lives. He was such an interesting character here! Lily, too, was extremely interesting.

I loved the language you used and the dialogue between Peter and Lily. This was such a beautiful one-shot and it was wonderful to read!

House Cup 2013,

Author's Response: I know this is forever late and I'm sorry :c Regardless, thank you so much for your lovely review! Lily/Peter is really weird and I'm not sure why I was so interested in it back then :P But I'm glad you think I've pulled it off along with his characterization. I think the parallelism between Snape/Peter was unintentional but probably an oversight on my part (I wouldn't have wanted to make him so similar in character). But I think it kind of says a lot about Lily's character as well - she attracts guys with their characteristics because of her personality. She's open and bright and relatively sweet and too nice for her own good when she sees people that are puppy-like. And I'm really glad you loved the language and dialogue - I had written this before where both seemed forced and unnatural so I'm glad this one fared well :P Thank you again for the review ^_^


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Review #2, by Opalpixiechick but of course not

4th October 2011:
That would explain why he betray them in the end. :/ Good story.

Author's Response: One of my theories :P Thank you for your review! -Mali

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Review #3, by ohtasha but of course not

4th October 2011:
This is beautiful, really beautiful and written so well. I love the idea behind it and the language you've used is inspired. Lovely!

Author's Response: Thank you very, very, very much! I'm really flattered, "inspired" isn't how I'd describe my writing at all. Thank you for your sweet review :) -Mali

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Review #4, by faerieall but of course not

31st August 2011:
Why does this have no reviews? It's such a great piece. First off, stunning banner. Secondly - I love this characterization of Peter. He isn't an outcast and he isn't the brightest boy on the planet, but by no means is he an idiot. He understands people and they way they work - to have tricked everyone, he had to have that ability. I like your Lily as well. She's a bit different than we usually see her. She's a bit cold, isn't she? Less warm, more her age, but she's still bright. She's in denial, as she probably would have been about James and I like it. Peter/Lily is more realistic to me than Sirius/Lily, at any rate because Sirius would never do that to James.

All in all, this was lovely. I loved your portrayal of the characters. One tiny error though - you should capitalize Quidditch. Really enjoyed this :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! And I know, Meghna is really amazing when it comes to graphics ♥ And thank you! I'm glad. I'm tired of not seeing Peter or having Peter be the dunce of the group that never talks or says anything of meaning. Lily was a very bright witch - how could it not have gone to her head? So I made her a bit overconfident, not as warm as she's usually portrayed and definitely in denial ;p Exactly! I'm in love with this ship because it's so different from the maruader-stereotype of a romance, and I find it much more realistic than Sirius/Lily. Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it. And oh! I should have known ;p I'll change it asap. Thank you again (:

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