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Review #1, by Gosia The Path

2nd August 2017:
And so it's done!
I'm sure that those four years ago it took me exactly three days to read ITB, just like this time. There's something so special about this story ❤
I don't really know what to say apart from this. I feel a bit strange that previous comments are YEARS old. But it's just so good. Call me a freak, but there's definitely more of those weird reviews to come, two books to go! And so many sad moments. :(
I love, love, LOVE your creation of Beth, and Sev, and Marauders in general.
And it's so much fun to be discovering this plot once again, and even though I remember the most important parts, it's so satisfying when it turns out what I thought was right - when Sev read Beth's letter, when they talked by the lake...
Sorry for that stupid rambling, it's just...! ❤

Author's Response: I have tears in my eyes -- you are so lovely. :) I can't wait to see what you think of the other two, too! Definitely not a freak. ♥ Pieces of my life are stuck in these words -- graduating from high school, starting college, all that stuff. And I'm past all that now, so it means the world to me that someone has reacted so strongly and wonderfully to what is essentially parts of me.

Never apologize!! I'm rambling too. Gah, you are just making my day, I really needed this in a strange way (I don't write so much anymore, not like I used to), and this is all reaffirming my ideas of why I wrote this. You are amazing! ♥ I am beyond thrilled that you still enjoy these books, and it means the world to me that you dropped back by and are leaving such wonderful thoughts!

Thank you!!!

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Review #2, by Gosia All Fall Down

2nd August 2017:
Oh dear, this chapter literally breaks my heart...
I'm not good at leaving comments as I read chapter by chapter, I don't think I've even left a comment here when I was reading "In The Black" for the first time, but yeah, my heart's in pieces now.
Oh, poor Sev. :c
Still, so very brilliant. Their minds, but especially Beth's, are just so... teenage, it's absolutely amazing and realistic. ❤

Author's Response: The fun thing is that as you're leaving ITB reviews, I'm going through and re-reading chapters myself -- it's been ages! You definitely never have to worry about leaving reviews chapter by chapter, or at all; I'm just tickled pink that you remember and still enjoy Sneth, all these years later. :3

I was a teenager when I wrote these, so it's interesting to go back and see how teenage they really were! Which is a good thing, but I'm sure I thought I was quite mature at the ripe old age of 17. I am so pleased it still reads to well to you. ♥ Thank you for all of these kind words, Gosia!! It's so lovely to hear from you again!

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Review #3, by Gosia Same Old Secret

31st July 2017:
I just couldn't help starting re-reading this excellent trilogy! It's been four years now, would you believe? And it's as good as I remembered, if not better. It's so nice to be here again. ❤

Author's Response: Hi! I can't believe you're still around and reading Sneth -- gosh, I can't believe it's been that long. It's actually been six years since I posted the first chapter of this!

Wow, it's good to hear from you. ♥ Thank you so much for stopping in here! I'm so, so glad you are still enjoying my story. At a time when I'm not writing as much as I used to, I can't tell you what that means to me. Thank you, thank you, thank you!!

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Review #4, by kissmeimdrunk The Path

28th February 2016:
Well I've just spent the whole of last week speed reading this first book! So, I guess it's your fault I've got nothing done :p haha. I'm hooked!

I'm sorry this is my first review, and I'll try to be better in the second book, but I hope ull take it as a compliment to your excellent writing.

Obviously I very much enjoyed your story and love the introduction of Beth. I do hope her and Sev can work it out someday! It really is a long, slow burn for these two lol!
But, anyway I just wanted to say how much I like it so far and can't wait to read on.

Author's Response: Hello -- thanks so much for reviewing! I know I'm not around too much anymore, but I do check for new reviews, and it really made my day to log in and see yours. :) Don't worry about not leaving a ton, either -- anything is lovely, seriously!

I love a slow burn romance, which is a bit criminal. ♥ But I'm super happy you've enjoyed it thus far! Thank you so, so much for taking the time to tell me! :)

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Review #5, by Cannons A Chance Meeting

27th November 2014:
Best Dumbledore characterisation ever. Or would that be going too far? I don't think so, really enjoyed the conversation between Dumbledore and Sirius. It was fun to read from a different POV as well.

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Review #6, by Cannons The Letter

27th November 2014:
Hufflepuff got smashed and there was a fight!

I really like how you showed Snape's home life in this chapter and tied it together with Beth's. Very neatly done!

Towards the end though when she wants to keep a secret...bad idea Beth!

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Review #7, by Cannons Concession

27th November 2014:
Awkward breakfast scenes are brilliant to read. Sirius acted exactly as I image he would in that situation.

Hopefully Hufflepuff get smashed in the next chapter!

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Review #8, by Cannons Rescue and Revelation

27th November 2014:
What a fast paced chapter and Beth couldn't transform! :( It's clever how you just weaves this cannon moment in to your own plot.

I wasn't expecting Beth to tell Snape and I'm not sure if she should have done, it probably should have been a group decision. Tensions were running high then.

I really wanted a duel at the end between the two, it is interesting to consider who would win that one.

I think Snape took that pretty well, but I can't wait to see what he does with the information, if anything.

Pretty tasteless joke though by Sirius, kind of went to far didn't he! :P

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Review #9, by Cannons Panic

27th November 2014:
Snape is heading for trouble!

I enjoyed the Peter and Beth scene and it made me smile when he'd gotten something wrong in the first line.

The part where Beth transforms was just so visual, I can see her transforming just as she steps.

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Review #10, by Cannons Seeking Refuge

27th November 2014:
I loved this chapter! You wrote Snape in such a normal way, which I don't normally see in marauders fics. It's still him but he cares and has feelings as any teenager would. I really liked the fact that you didn't go Over the top with him straight away.

What really stood out was how his 'friends' aren't really his friends at all, they just happen to be in the same house, things could have been so different!

The exchange between Beth and himself was great to read. Fair play to him for not completely snapping her head off.

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Review #11, by Cannons Unsuspected, Unexpected

27th November 2014:
I really enjoyed this chapter, it was such a neat idea that Snape had at the beginning of the chapter to pretend that he knew what was going on.mi really did think Beth was going to say something she was going to regret for a second.

As always, the thing I notice about your writing is how you keep the plot and the story moving. Sentences like 'As the weeks inched by...' And 'the first moon passed without incident '

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Review #12, by Cannons The Confrontation

22nd November 2014:
Haha I loved this chapter! I remember reading this one because I read your author notes and realised just how annoying it would be if I would have had to wait for a new chapter to be uploaded!

I think that Remus is quickly becoming one of my favourites. He is so calm and gives the group the balance that they all need. I really found it amusing though when he raised an eyebrow at Beth over his book when she had her little outburst.

Snape is slowly starting to figure it all out, they really do need to be more careful!

I love the tension that Beth is feeling trying not to let her feelings slip and James is noticing the hints I am sure!

The ending was perfect as well!

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Review #13, by Cannons Unforeseen Suspicions

22nd November 2014:
Back again!

I have decided that what I really do like most about your writing is the connection from the previous chapter, you always have those first few lines which drags you back in to Beth's world! (I've worded that dreadfully, but hopefully you know what I mean!)

Haha, they are such a team aren't they, it's great how they always have each others backs. One second they are all in there own worlds, Beth watching Lily smiling at James etc and then Peter speaks and the reaction is instant! I really found that funny! The image of Beth eating Peter!

I can't remember if there is any darker reason why Peter doesn't want everyone at the transformations, but my instinct is telling me there isn't. I will read on though, because I feel like that is important for some reason!

As we know what happens to Peter, the line where he looks a little scared has even more meaning, especially as he isn't even in any immediate danger! I like how you're building his character though. You've said he's a worrier, not the most tactful and not as brave as the others.

Snape's line here 'I've been watching you for years' - not creepy at all!

I liked the interaction between the two off them and especially the way you have written Snape. He seems to be obsessed with the Marauders and if cannon is anything to go by, it's not worth him finding out what is going on between them!

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Review #14, by Cannons Gossip and Guilt

21st November 2014:
I stopped reading half way through the second book when RL got in the way, but I finally have the time to start this series again and give it all the reviews it deserves. :D

There was something so familiar when I started reading the first two chapters again and it was a lovely feeling. I love Beth and how you write the marauders.

I don't really have anything intelligent to say in this review because it is so late but I will be back very soon.

Author's Response: Hey! It's so nice to hear from you again, especially since (forgive me!) I've stopped writing fan fiction in the past year to concentrate on writing original fiction that I'm working on submitting to literary agents. Long story short, it's really wonderful to know that you still think of, and are willing to re-read, this novel. I was thinking about Snape and Beth just yesterday myself!

Thank you so much for coming back for Sneth round two. ♥ It really means so much to me that you did! I hope you continue to enjoy the story, and I'd love to hear from you again!

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Review #15, by MuNition The Malleable Future

30th June 2014:
Oh come on, I'm loving this story, but if you show the Gryffindors any more love while glossing over their faults (match to marauder: jock, thug, spineless, coward. It didn't even take you ten seconds and we both know you got it right) while doing the exact opposite to Slytherins I might seriously consider myself done here. A good dichotomy is fun, but it flattens out the characters.

Author's Response: I kind of have beef with you about this one, not going to lie. The original series treated Gryffindors well and Slytherins poorly because the book was through Harry's eyes. Same thing here: Beth is a Gryffindor. Her friends are Gryffindors. They're obviously going to be portrayed in a better light.

I myself am a Slytherin. It's nothing against the house. But I'm kind of surprised you kept reading if you had such a big issue with this. Sorry you found it "flat."

Thanks for reviewing.

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Review #16, by MuNition The Order Assignments

30th June 2014:
I suppose this is *very* early Order days, because otherwise, the way to allocate soldiers is never done completely pre-training for everyone. As to Beth fitting (or not) into her role, you do not know that until after training and a few fights, so I'm tentatively siding with Dumbledore's judgment here.

I've known some extremely competent soldiers by my side that you would have never guessed in a million years that this would be what they'd be doing.

Author's Response: Yeah, it is very early Order days. Also, it's fiction (meta-fiction, really), so I just wanted my characters to go where I wanted them -- and I was seventeen or eighteen when I wrote this. Still, thanks for reviewing, and sorry for responding so late.

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Review #17, by MuNition The Row

30th June 2014:
I think this is the tragic point of Snape's tale. At this point in his life, he believes that being a second class citizen would be an improvement over what both magical and muggle worlds offer him. The sad thing?

He's probably right. Hogwarts won't get you a muggle job... and the magical world has proven as uninviting as the muggle one for him. I think that this is the part that people miss - Severus Snape is not an idiot, and he knows full-well that trusting any form of human kindness is wrong.

A point of interest that I stumbled upon that most people under 40 and from outside the UK don't know (I sure didn't) was just how prominent the class system was in the UK pre-80s. Middle class people just did *not* have working class (or god forbid, lower class) associations over the age of 18. Petunia's attitude towards Snape was absolutely normal - even rather benign.

An example of this is the word "soccer", which is hated in the UK. It was the word for the game of football used *exclusively* by the upper class (expensive schools, etc), and as such, forced upon the BBC to the annoyance of fans (football is and was a working class sport). In certain schools, I know for a fact that up to 1985, the punishment for playing "soccer" was a caning.

Oh yeah, the UK didn't illegalize corporal punishment at schools until nearly 1990, so for people saying that a father beating his child was rare in the lower class 60s/70s in England's working class, the exceptions were rarer. JKR actually acknowledges this (Arthur Weasley's scars from punishments at Hogwarts) and basically all but outright states that Severus Snape was probably beaten at home.

Though you did, as JKR, what I think is the smart choice by leaving it out of writing. I am loving this, though the amount of estrogen in this story is starting to get a bit stifling (though thankfully devoid of endless lists of clothing and perfumes), will read it through to the end. I will take a break from it eventually. I think.

Author's Response: Thanks for the lesson, though as you pointed out, it's not quite relevant to this story. As I am a girl, I do have a healthy amount of estrogen -- sorry some of it leaked into my story, I guess. Sorry this is a late response, but thanks for reviewing.

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Review #18, by MuNition The Confrontation

30th June 2014:
Loving it so far, though it's already quite radically AU - Lily couldn't help but find Snape's post OWL humiliation funny (yes, prior to the M-word being uttered), the Werewolf incident happened during 6th year - the animagi remained unrevealed, and this is probably the reason James got his Head Boy badge despite his disciplinary record (and it would have been revoked, probably, if said animagi abilities were public, invalidating the "willing to risk his life" thing)... As everyone *knows* (aka Sirius tried to smooth over said inconvenient truth and Remus told Harry that) James finally stopped hexing people for fun in the 7th year.

OK, now that I've got the serial complaining streak thing out of the way, I really like this. Snape is my favorite character, followed by Sirius and Luna (alas, she is around three years from being a picnic and some spilled wine for her parents in this story). The fact that you can spell automatically makes this story a win in my column :)

Well written so far, enjoyable and somewhat neutral... a solid opener all around. And it's a trilogy! YAY HAPPY GOOD TIMES OF PLENTIFUL READING! You will have to imagine the start of my beer belly jiggling to an exuberant happy dance now. Sorry about that.

Author's Response: Yep, that's why it's classified as AU. I'm glad you enjoyed it though. Sorry for the late response, but thanks for reviewing.

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Review #19, by Vivyan A Question

15th March 2014:
Bah I mean it's brilliant and gushy and lovey-dovey and wonderful but does anyone else think it's strange that a guy has ages to think over the possibility of marriage with a woman and to propose and the woman has barely any time to consider that fact?

Author's Response: Are you talking in general? Because a lot of women talk with their significant others about marriage before he pops the question! It's not as though she won't have ever thought about it before the proposal. ;)

That said, I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter! Thank you for taking the time to review, and I hope you continue on! ♥

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Review #20, by Cannons The Path

6th November 2013:

(I'm not always that dramatic)

You know when I said I was saving this and reading a chapter at a time? yeahh..? well I failed.. Read from chapter 11 to 34 since yesterday. I really should catch up on some sleep!

This was so well written, it's unbelievable. The biggest thing about this for me was how well planned it was ( or seemed to be) I think a lot of people would have maybe jumped right in to the plot and ship-y stuff way to early, but I loved how you took your time developing Beth to the reader and the rest of the Marauders, as well as Snape of course. I've really come to like Beth and think she really does fit perfectly in with the Marauders and has officially joined them in my head now. I was reading another Marauders era fic, and I was like 'HEY, where's Beth?' and then I remembered..


Anyways I think I'm going to bombard your MTA with questions now.

this was a seriously amazing story and am so happy that I have two more to go!

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed the first book so much! It makes me happy to know that you read so much and couldn't put it down, and especially that you found it well-written. It was definitely hard not to have Beth and Severus making out in every chapter, but that's just not who they are!

Also: Beth is totally a canon Marauder. Fact. You won't be able to convince me otherwise. ♥

Thank you for reviewing!

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Review #21, by Cannons Same Old Secret

18th October 2013:

I'm not here for any good reason other than to tell you how amazing this story is so far, I've only read a couple of chapters but I absolutely love your writing style, I can't explain it but it just seems so effortless and natural. Just knowing that there is a whole trilogy about Beth Bridger makes me smile! You just might hear from me in the future :)

Author's Response: This review just made my whole day. ♥ Especially at a time in my life where I'm in something of a writing slump! I'm so glad to hear from you, and even more glad to hear that you're enjoying Beth's story so far. Your compliment about my writing style is beyond appreciated.

Basically, what I'm trying to say -- thank you very, very, very much for this review! :) I look forward to hearing from you again!

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Review #22, by Rumpelstiltskin The Path

4th October 2013:
I cannot tell you the last time that I sat down and read a story so quickly (due to avid enthusiasm and only brief breaks?, but then this story came along! I really thought that my fiance was going to confiscate my computer!

This story has brought me endless entertainment! I loved it so very much and it left me wanting more, more, more! Luckily for me, there are still two more entire books to go!!

Thank you so much for writing it!


Author's Response: Thank YOU so much for being such a lovely and enthusiastic reviewer! I know those sorts of stories, the ones that make you want to keep reading at all costs, and I'm pleased and flattered beyond words that my story was one for you.

I can't wait to hear your opinion on books 2 and 3! The more I wrote of this story, the more I loved it, and if I can be so bold to say so, I think the books only improved as I wrote more. :) Your thoughts will be very highly valued!

Thank you again for such an awesome review!! ♥

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Review #23, by Rumpelstiltskin Just Words

2nd October 2013:
Regretfully, it is nearly time for work yet again, which means that I will have to pause my reading. I thought, though, that this would be the perfect opportunity to also pause and leave a review, as I am thoroughly enjoying myself!

I just adore this story. Between Beth's relationships with her friends and her long-neglected love interest, this story has had me engrossed from even the very first chapter! She fits into the canon fabulously and the relationships she has developed with her friends are very believable.

The chapter's flow perfectly from scene to scene, the point of view placed in Beth's perspective is sufficiently neat and well-focused, the plot is gripping and interesting, and the dialogue between characters is clear, urging me to say that this story is very well written! Also, the characters are very well-developed, especially Beth's. I just love Beth.

I am a die-hard Severus Snape fan, as well. His character seems to be perfectly in canon and I'm anxious to see a relationship develop between he and Beth!

I absolutely cannot wait until work is over so that I can read more of this beautiful fan fiction!


Author's Response: It's taken me two years to respond to this review, but better late than never! I'm very happy to hear that you enjoyed ITB, Beth, and the gang so much. I do miss writing them.

And it makes me super happy to hear that you enjoyed my depiction of Snape! He is forever my favorite. ♥

Thanks for the review!

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Review #24, by maskedmuggle The Path

20th September 2013:

I realise this is one of your older stories but I really wanted to read this so I could read In the Red and consequently, Breaking Even. (I'm really big about reading stories in order, and I have to read preceding stories first!) I also really wanted to just read more stuff of yours in general because I know you're an awesome writer and I have shamefully only read your ScoRose novella and a few chapters here and there of one-shots or whatever! Ahem, anyway, to the actual point of this review.. I really enjoyed reading this novel! I've never read something like this before - a story about someone who actually has a crush on Snape of all people. So I found that it was definitely a super original idea for a story!

I thought that throughout, each chapter was developed really well and I loved how you weaved in the canon details that we know - making the map, Snape finding out about the animagus and Remus, the growing tension/conflict over blood purity.. it made it all seem more realistic and believable. I also thought Beth was an interesting character, and I really enjoyed how you characterised the rest of the Marauders!

There were 2 things I was a bit uncertain about with the story. Firstly, Beth's actual crush on Snape - I don't think you ever talked about exactly what Beth found attractive about Snape? (So sorry if I'm wrong lol). I feel like that missing element made it a little harder for me to believe in Beth's crush itself (as in.. was it his physical appearance.. or something about his character/the way he acts?). Okay, secondly, I was a little uncertain about the way they all 'join' the Order - it just seems a little unrealistic to me that all of them were only recruited by chance because of Sirius' eavesdropping? I can see why you did it though, and it is probably a good way to introduce the Order as part of them since I feel like the trilogy will go on beyond their Seventh Year at Hogwarts..

Anyway, I did really enjoy reading each chapter of this! I really liked how the "relationship" between Snape and Beth slowly developed and wasn't too rushed (I did feel like there were perhaps a few more-than-normal chance encounters between them though) :P I also really liked seeing parts of this from Snape's thoughts - as in, getting to hear what Snape felt about Beth and his thoughts about his 'friends'. All in all, you are definitely a talented writer, no doubt about that - I found myself so engaged in the story. I'll definitely be reading the sequel to this now! I can't wait to see what you'll do from now on.. especially how we all know in canon Snape is a double agent because he forever loved Lily.. and I'm really looking forward to how Snape and Beth will both turn out! Awesome story and really well written! :)

- Charlotte

Author's Response: Char! ♥ Oh, it's been ages. Absolute ages. And I would totally be the same way about reading stories in order -- and this one you really sort of need to, especially book 2 before book 3. So it makes perfect sense to me! I'm sorry this response is a bit delayed. I'm trying to keep on top of things!

I'm so happy you enjoyed this, too! There are a few (probably more than a few) failings, but this entire trilogy is so ingrained in my writer-ness that it's hard to do anything but love it. Hardly ANYBODY writes Snape/OCs, especially not when the love interests are at school, and most of my novels come from gaps in the market. ;) Weaving in canon and making it believable, even with the inclusion of Beth, was something that I was very conscious about, and it makes me so happy when readers mention and appreciate it. Really! And Marauders is now my favorite era to write, solely because of this. The boys are awesome, full stop.

Beth's crush on Snape really isn't as developed as I'd like it to be, and I'd probably do that differently now, but it's just sort of implied she's attracted to him on a physical level, mostly, since they've never really had a proper conversation. As for how they join the Order, it's so vague on how that comes about, and that was a big struggle in this first book. It's clearly not common knowledge, but how do a band of misfits find out about it and sign right up, you know? Sirius would be obnoxious enough to keep pressing the point after overhearing something, so that's why it came out like that. :) The trilogy does go up until late 1981, so the Order's a big part of books two and three.

The relationship between Beth and Sev is basically slower than molasses. Chance encounters or no, it'll take a while for ANYTHING to really happen!

I can't wait to hear your thoughts on ITR and BE. ♥ I'm so happy right now, reading over this review! And immensely flattered by your compliments. ♥ Thank you so much for reviewing!!

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Review #25, by Courtney Dark The Path

6th August 2013:
I could not imagine a better ending to book one! Seriously, everything was perfect, and there's really nothing more to say that that! (Sorry, this one is going to be another ludicrously short review, my eyes are drooping).

I actually really liked the 'girl moment' even though it was very short, because we haven't had many of those. And then the entrance of the guys was great - I kinda like the fact that Beth is staying over at Sirius's. I don't know why (and I could be completely off the mark here) but I've always sensed a little chemistry between the two of them, especially Sirius towards Beth. I'm wondering now if anything will happen in the next chapter, and how long they will be living together.

The section from Severus's point of view was perfect, and definitely sufficiently creepy - it actually gave me goosebumps! And those last few lines were amazing!

I'm looking forward to book two!

Author's Response: *squealing like a fangirl* THANK YOU, THANK YOU, THANK YOU. I'm always concerned about endings, and -- well, this was the ending to the first of three books, so there was sort of a lot resting on it. I'm very pleased with it myself, but I did want others to enjoy it, too! You poor thing, you and your sleepiness. I feel sort of bad you stayed up so late reading.

We really didn't get a lot of girl moments in this story -- and, of course, Beth's best friends are all boys, so it's understandable. There really aren't a lot of girl moments in the trilogy, period. I don't think Beth can relate as well to other females. ;) AND I JUST CAN'T TELL YOU ANYTHING ABOUT SIRIUS/BETH. Oh, man, I'm just rocking back and forth in my seat, thinking about what you don't know. I'm excited for you to read certain chapters -- that's all I can say!

Goosebumps?! Seriously? ♥ I can't tell you what that means to me! And, at the risk of sounding completely incoherent, because my brain is leaking out my ears: Thank you. Thank you /so much/ for loving this story so much, and for leaving reviews on every darn chapter, and for being so enthusiastic and wonderful and... ♥ Readers like you are why I'm still writing and posting stories. I love knowing that people enjoy what I do!

I can't wait to get to more of your ITR reviews! You're amazing!!

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