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Review #1, by adluvshp

The loss of the loved one we truely loved

7th August 2011:

hi there. (first reviewer :D)

Well the plot of the story seems interesting. I am a little confused with all the characters so perhaps you could write it in a less-confusing way? I don't know, just try to re-phrase it or something. I also suggest getting a beta for this nice story because there can be many improvements done here. The way of writing is fine though there were some grammar errors here and there. Again, the beta could fix them for you. The ending lines of the story were quite impacting and moving, kudos!

all in all a nice chapter.

good job.

8/10

cheers!
AD

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End of an era Review extravaganza: House Cup 2011

Forum Name: AditiDraco95
House: Slytherin

Author's Response: Thank you for the nice review. The end is a twist but its in progress. I have a system I write the storys in a book and edit them and rewrite. Thanks for the info and i am working on it now. The whole story is in each chapter a friend of Bailee's is killed and finally it all comes back to her mistakes in the past and she must protect Logan as a mission by Snape. Next she will go flying and someone will get murdered again thanks for the review.

Sencerely,

NevilleandLuna

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