I was literally just listening to the song you put in the chapter summary, like, ten minutes ago! :)
I liked the chapter, but I do think its moving kinda fast.
About how many chapters are you planning for this?

Author's Response: In order to not make everyone lose interest I needed to speed things up and although it seems like a simple story, I will get really complicated, really fast.

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Seems like a good story.
There are quite a few typos and grammatical errors in all the chapters. You might want to read them through a couple of times before you post them, or have the beta-read.
I like Lyla. I understand that she tried to forget everything by partying and immersing herself into books and their stories. And I get that that would cost her her friends. It must be hard for her to not go back to the parties every once in a while. But I'm very glad that she takes the responsibilty she has seriously. She's maturing, she's growing up. And it's very admirable that she took on the Head Girl position. I hope she'll be able to cope with all the pressure (that, mostly, she herself exerts).
I wonder how things will work out. Especially after she leaves Hogwarts. But I guess that she'll have a lot more support by then.
I'm looking forward to hearing more about her siblings and seeing more Rose/Lyla and Albus/Lyla interaction. And I also want to meet Scorpius, of course.
Good work.

Author's Response: Wow, I just found out by looking at this review how horrible of a person I am. I have spent no time on this story and I need to change that. I will go back and look at my mistakes so thank you for pointing them out, and hopefully I can re-look at this story and find out how to go about adding to this story.

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It's great that you made Albus judgmental and disappointed in Lyla because that's probably what would happen in real life, especially if he liked her romantically. It'll be interesting to see how he changes.

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I really liked this a lot :)
Can't wait for the next chapter!
-Jess

Author's Response: It is being validated as we speak and I love any feed back you can give me. :)

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