I think that this was really well done, showing just how much a terrible thing (or, in this case, things) can affect a person for a long time afterwards.
I love how you drew the comparison between the father and the son, how Albus knows that they look similar physically, but that they are much different in very subtle ways. The look in their eyes, the blemishes on their skin, even the way they sleep at night. It all paints a deeper, much darker picture, one that you wrote so well.
I also love the hints of the familial relationship- James and Lily not fully understanding what their dad's gone through, the brotherly insults, the comfort Ginny gives Harry (I loved that line: "Sometimes Mum puts her hand on his shoulder and smiles at him, silently reminding her husband that everything is okay.")
And I think that the end was very well done. It felt like a conclusion, if that makes any sense. But all in all, I really enjoyed reading this and it was a nice (possible) insight into the mind of one of Harry Potter's sons. Report Review
Very well written! I love this insight into Albus, you have a way of writing something poetic and entertaining. A very enjoyable read and I think you nailed Albus, Harry and the rest of the family.
10/10 (as always :) Report Review
Oh, wow. Albus was quite the little observer here, no? I liked how he was so insightful and thoughtful and loving. It must've been hard for him to live up to his name, especially as the way he resembled his father's face was uncanny. It reminded me of Harry a little bit, when people kept telling him he looked like his James. Albus and Harry had different experiences, though, because Albus actually knew the his father. He grew up with him, knew what made them different, knew what haunted him... it was a very nice contrast.
It was quite heartbreaking to read about Harry in Albus eyes. We all know Harry wouldn't be completely fine after the war, but he was coping here. Harry was trying and that was rather comforting to know.
I like that you didn't focus into how much Albus hated the comparison between him and his father. He handled it so maturely and for me, that made this story stand out. Great job overall!
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Wow, that was an amazing comparison. Albus has a really mature way of thinking. I really liked the way he saw the people's comparison between him and his father. There were the same eyes, but that haven't seen as much. Having almost same bodies, but that haven't been through so much... I especially liked the part with the scar, how people liked it as a subject of conversation, something like weather, but Albus knew there was more than that. The shadows of Harry's past as 'more than all the ghosts in Hogwarts' - that was a just incredible description!
On the overall, the one-shot was amazing!
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wow!!! just.. WOW!!! Report Review
Wow, this was great! :) Report Review
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