This story is so romantic please, please update soon.:)Author's Response: thank you and i will soon :) Report Review
If you need a beta or someone to check the grammar and spelling, I'll be glad to.
But other than that, amazing plot so far. I really cannot wait for the next chapter.Author's Response: thank u and sure my email is lauren280493@hotmail co uk just email me you details and what story u want 2 bata for :P Report Review
hey hpfanatic2010 my email is lauren280493@hotmail co uk just email you detail and what stories u want bata :) Report Review
Hi! I just want to say that I really love your story. And also, do you have a Beta yet? Because if not, I'll volunteer for it. :P If you want, you can send me a personal message about it and we can work out the details. But I really would love to Beta this story. :DAuthor's Response: thank you and no not yeat but i really like that thank u i really need a bata :) Report Review
i like the plot please keep writing!
its so reallly good with few grammar errors!!Author's Response: thank u and i'm trying 2 fixs the grammar :) Report Review
ok this is a really good story. i like the plot, the idea and the characters. you wrote it out really well but there is a huge problem. your grammer and spelling. it is a very good story but reveiw it more before posting. if you want, i can be your beta.
technically, i just review the story for errors in grammer and stuff before you submit it. good job and if you want to take me up on the offer, just look up my pen name and figure out a way to contact me!!!
haha keep writing and keep up the good work ;)Author's Response: yeah thanks i will do cause my bata is really busy so i will look u up thanks 4 the review :P Report Review
Hi there! :)
Wow! This was such an interesting story. Very different and intriguing plot line. You had me into it from the start.
This was nicely done. There were good descriptions of everything going on, but there were some mistakes here and there. Like grammar, spelling, or punctuation. I'm not gonna put them all in here, but there was one line in the last paragraph that I just had to show you:
the next bang I have a density to be with James Potter for the rest of my life
I think you mean destiny and not density. ;)
But that's all okay! Nicely done for sure! This was really enjoyable and such a different take on things. Good job! :)
Forum Name: Phoenix_Flames
House: HufflepuffAuthor's Response: thanks 4 the review and i work on the grammer more :P Report Review
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