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Review #1, by Akussa Running, lots of running.

7th December 2011:
Hi! You're tagged!

Sorry if this review comes in a tad late, I posted it earlier but something happened and it didn't record or something so, this is a second take at the review. It might be a bit shorter than the previous one sorry about that.

I really liked that story a lot, it was very funny. I liked the characters and the premise of having James and Scorpius as best friends. I found Rose was especially well written and hilarious.

Overall, I really enjoyed it and loughed a lot through my read. Great job, I think you've got a knack for writting humor. I did notice a couple typos and punctuation problems through the piece but the story made up for it! Nothing a good read-through can't fix though!

Author's Response: Its totally fine! I'm glad you liked that it was more of a friends story, and Rose does seem to stick out the most. Lol.
Yay! My funny comes across, that's what I worry about most. :D


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Review #2, by The_seeker12 Running, lots of running.

9th November 2011:
I love Rose in this story. :) She's great. Scorpius is pretty fun too.
It's cute. I like it.

Author's Response: Aww, thanks. Rose seems to be the one who sticks out most in these stories even though its about the boys. lol. Thank you for reviewing! :D

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Review #3, by MyMyMiss Running, lots of running.

20th September 2011:
I instantly was taking to this because you had JamessII && Scorpius as best friends as they are in my chaos story as well, and I lawyas believed that it was a good touch to have them best friends even though In my story I put James in Slytherin.

None the less this little one-shot was soo funny. I am still laughing ^_^ && Rose? :O Rose Weasley? Hermione Weasleys Daughter? Well who else could do compicated spells like that? lol

This is a very well written story, filled with humour and I love it!!

10/10. - + Another 10 for making me laugh so hard ^_^ lol
This was great!!

~Karni. xx

Author's Response: Hehehehehe! your review makes me so happy! I'm glad that you liked that James&Scorpius are best friends in it, it confirms my decision to do something out of the ordinary. and yay the humor came across well!
Thank you!!


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Review #4, by lizmusic45 Running, lots of running.

9th September 2011:
Rose was really good! I loved her personality! As for your first next-gen you actually are pretty good at it!

I give a lot of credit to people that write next-gen. They have to develop new personalities, and remember all the people in that huge family.

You are no different, so I think this was actually quite good, and even though I'm very wary of next gen I really did enjoy this story :)

Lizzie

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I was honestly really nervous about writing next gen because of all that, and everyone's pre made assumptions about them. Glad you liked Rose because I am writing a novel on her now. :D

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Review #5, by TenthWeasley Running, lots of running.

14th August 2011:
Hello! It's TenthWeasleyWriter from the forums with the review you asked from me.

I love the idea of this story -- stories about pranks and humorous camaraderie are always so much fun to write, and possibly even more fun to read. For your first next gen, you wrote this pretty well, too. I think that how everything got resolved -- from running from Filch, to finding out that Rose was the one who fixed the gargoyle -- was quite innovative and clever, too, so well done.

Rose's personality was definitely my favorite -- snarky and sassy, which I think is a good combination of Hermione and Ron's personalities. Each of your characters is written well, though, as far as characterization goes, and it's clear you had fun writing them.

I am going to be very honest with you, though -- there are a LOT of small errors in this story. I would definitely look into getting a beta, because they can help out with this kind of thing, and look over your work before you submit it. One thing you need to work on a bit closely is using apostrophes when talking about possessives (James's rather than James'; gargoyle's instead of gargoyles).

Another thing is homophones, like "too" or "two" instead of "to" -- I caught that several times. These are errors that word processing software won't catch, because they are technically words, and you as the writer must be on your toes looking for them. Additionally, there are places in the story where you switch tenses, and it makes it not flow very well, so watch for that too.

Again, I strongly recommend getting a beta, who can help you with these in this story, and also help you to recognize them on your own in further pieces. But this was a funny little story and I enjoyed it. Thank you for requesting! (5/10)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this! I needed the honest opinion, as grammar seems to be the bane of my existence in writing :/ So I think I am going to invest in a beta for sure.
Characters and plot are usually my most important factors, but I guess that grammar is an important part of readability as well.
I am really glad you still enjoyed it though :).
Again, thank you so much!


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