Another good chapter. You certainly know how to tell a story, I could not stop smiling throughout.
A few more spelling errors that once corrected will do wonders to inhance your story.
Can I make a suggestion? Before you post your story, go into word and type up your chapter. Once that is done you could make the corrections and then copy and paste onto the site.
You have what I believe to be a really good story here.
Another 10/10 and plz update when you can. Bye for now.Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing all of my chapters. That makes me so happy and I love that I made you smile. :)
I hope all the mistakes weren`t to bothering. I`m going to put it into my writing programm again and see if it finds some mistakes, but i thought I had corrected all the ones it pointed out. But thank you for telling me abaout the mistakes.
thank you again and again and again. Report Review
Again I loved this chapter. I loved the cats eye view of the discription of the gents toilet LOL:D.
Again a few spelling mistakes that can be corrected. Another 10/10 and onto the next chapter.Author's Response: i loved writing that. it was so funny to imagine a bathroom in a cats POV that I got a bit carried away. IÂ´m glad you liked it and didnÂ´t think it was too long, because I was a bit worried about that.
Thanks for the review again. Report Review
Another lovely, good chapter. I loved the referrence to the cat bringing a mouse for the humans to eat. I had to laugh at that one.
A few more spelling errors but easly corrected with the spell check.
Again nice chapter and 10/10 must read on.Author's Response: Thanks again.
I always wonder what the cats think if they bring all those mice to our home. Report Review
I totally adore cats and also completly crazy for them. So when I noticed that your story involved a cat, I had to check it out.
I love it, your involvment of a cat was beautifully written (though you do have a few spelling mistakes throughout) and I look forward to reading more.
May I suggest that you copy and paste your chapters onto word and have your spell check set for English (uk). Then replace your old chapter after you've made any corrections.
9/10 for this chapter and onto your next one.Author's Response: Thank you for the kind review. IÂ´m so glad you liked it and thank you for leaving a review. IÂ´m copleatly crazy about cats too and I really miss my two cats since I moved out of my parents house. That is probably where the story came from too ;)
I actually do type it with the spell check switched to English, but aparently it doesnÂ´t catch all the mistakes. Report Review
Great job with the characters and the flow of this piece, but a few things disconcerted me when it came to grammar/spelling. Here are some things I'd like to point out:
In this chapter's title, you spelled prologue incorrectly. Instead of Prolog, it should be Prologue.
First sentence: In the beginning my live was not very eventful I lived in a room with lots of other animals.
Instead of live, it should be life and a period should be added after 'eventful'.
Other than that, there are a few more grammar, spelling, and capitalization errors. Like I said though, your characters and plot are brilliant. I can't wait to see what happens next.
Hope I was helpful!Author's Response: Thank you for pointing out the mistakes. It was very helpful. I corrected them now.
My English teacher always tells me that I make the "live" mistake far to often. It is one of my typical mistakes. It is kind of embarrassing that I still make it after someone corrected it about hundreds of times. Anyway (sorry about my rambling) thanks a lot for the review.
I`m very glad that you liked my story so far. Report Review
Nicely done. I like the way you are using a cat for the point of view. Really interesting.
Now, some issues I saw: when you use "big ones" it should be capatalized like Muggle, Auror, Death Eater ect. I also saw some spelling mistakes. When you use the phrase "human kitten" I think you should stick to "Big Ones", that way you maintain the perspective of the cat.
I like how you have captured the voice of a kitten in the story, just like that of a child. I hope as Rose gets older the cat matures with her. I am sure it will.
Again, very well done.
I look forward to more of this story.Author's Response: I`m really glad you like the story so far.
I think I`m going to capitalize it from now on and correct it in this chapter. Thank you for that idea. I didn`t thought of doing that.
I`m sorry about the spelling mistakes, I`m not a native English speaker (that is probably not a very good excuse, but it kind of explains the mistakes).
I have the next chapter written, i just have to read it through again.
Thank you again for the review. Report Review
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