Having read a lot of fanfiction for various fandoms, I can tell you why OC centric stories tend to be frowned upon. The story is all about this one OC the writer creates and the OCs friends and their slice of life adventures through the fandom, no connection to the characters, and really not the place either.
This one though, is based around an actual plotline idea. For this storyline idea, it won't be as effective if you use canon characters I think. I enjoy the fact that your fanfic also gives good depth to the characters, something the other fanfics lack.
Looking foward to the next chapter. Report Review
Normally I don't like stories that don't involve the canon characters, but this feels like a story that the students would read about, like classic literature, or maybe tell ghost stories of.
He's a very likable character, despite being designed not to be likable. Then again, he was meant to be the scapegoat in this series. He doesn't seem very bright, and by that I don't mean not intelligent, but slow on the uptake of things.
Anyways, on to the next chapter. Report Review
Hm, your OC's are interesting. I'm not entirely sure if I trust Evanna or Tom's father, they both seem a bit sketchy. Riley hasn't had his moment to shine yet, I think anyway because he seemed more like a background character compared to Evanna and Tom. I can already sense that something is going to happen at the Gobstones tournament or maybe I'm just being silly because I'm trying to figure out the mystery.
I still don't have any idea on what's going to happen! Grrr! Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Just a few things:
- Tom said nonchalantly, unwrapping a chocolate frog and popping it in his mouth before it tried to make a break for freedom. It was the one thing he couldn’t s
I think you're missing a word or perhaps the rest of the sentence?
There's also a few tiny mistakes throughout the chapter but they can easily be fixed with a re-read. Report Review
Your summary intrigued me so I had to read the story. I wasn't sure at first when I read your author's note saying it takes place 200 years after Harry. But you know what, I'm not missing Mr. Potter at all. I actually like Grute, he's not boring at all.
The whole story interests me, the names, the plot, the death. I can't even begin to question who or what killed the student (and the students to come). Report Review
Hello! At first I wasn't too sure about the story being all OCs, and a different era, but this was really good. (even if it's just the prologue) I thouht it was neat how you didn't write a story that's been told a lot of times. This seems really original, especially it being 200 years after Hogwarts. I really like murder mysteries, and think it will be interesting to see how it folds out. Poor Grute, being framed for something that he probably didn't do. He must have been at the wrong place at the wrong time. Please put the next chapter up soon! I promise to follow along with the series! Update soon!Author's Response: Thank you so much for the reveiw! Yes, I too was a little hesitant about making it completely OC, seeing as most people don't like reading a story full of OC's. But then I reminded myself that I was not writing to please people, I was writing because I loved to do it, and so stuck with the idea. Yes, the entire story, and series infact, is frankly nothing that can possibly duplicated in another form, so I'm a bit excited as I know that no one else but me can tell this story. And yes it's sad about Grute, but the thing is, how does one know that he didn't comit the murder? He can't even remember it and like he said, he does walk in his sleep. But of course, you're going to have to wait and see how it plays out. ;) Updates will be soon, and the next chapter should be out next week. Once again, thanks a ton for reveiwing, it means a lot. Report Review
I do like a good mystery. And this appears to be a really mysterious one. A clock is the only clue, mmm I think I'll need more information before I attempt any answers for that one.
I like the sound of your original character. Grute, how did you come up with that name?
You do need to go through your story again and make a few minor corrections to spelling and grammer.
But apart from that,good start. 9/10 and plz update soon. Adding you to fav story list.Author's Response: Thank you so much for your reveiw! I honestly don't remember how I came up with the name Grute, it has been in the back of my head for a while now and I suppose it made it's debut as a so-called murderer. Your right, I do need to go back and fix my spelling and grammer, I'm horrible at that, no matter how many times I do correct it. Maybe I should get a beta? Thank you so much for you reveiw! Report Review
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