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Review #1, by maskedmuggle Hogwarts beckons

7th August 2011:
This was another good chapter! I liked how this one was focused more on Ginny's perspective, which was great! I thought Ginny was a little OOC also, as she just suddenly started noticing Draco. However, it seems your story is aiming for AU, so it's not a problem.

I really liked how you wrote the Draco apologising to the boy scene. I like how he still does it a bit roughly, and awkwardly as well, which is great, because that's more suited to his canon characterisation as we know it.

I liked the conversation in the carriages as well, but again, felt that Draco trying to insult them by complimenting them was out of his character. Maybe it would help to get a beta to look at this story also? There's some inconsistency in the grammar, punctuation and sentence structure.

Don't get me wrong though, this was a very interesting chapter! I would be interested in finding out more about your story, and about Ginny/Draco! Great work!

- maskedmuggle, Ravenclaw :)

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Review #2, by maskedmuggle Prologue

7th August 2011:
Very interesting chapter! Ginny/Draco hey? I see so many Dramiones around, frankly, it's very refreshing to read about Ginny/Draco! I quite like the way you're going with this story. They both hate each other, and I'm curious to see how you're going to get them to 'fall in love'.

I really liked the first part. You really, really described Draco's home/family life perfectly! Their family is indeed too 'formal' - that's such an apt word to use! I liked how you talked about Draco's relationship with his mother and father as well, and it was so very true as well. There probably wasn't any love, just respect.

Unless you were going for a little AU, Draco is a bit too much OOC, suddenly just staring at Ginny and suddenly becoming enraptured by her without a second thought. If possible, I would try to add a bit more development there. Other than that, great first chapter!

- maskedmuggle, Ravenclaw :)

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