Nice story, but you could have used more descriptions to give the story more emotion. Three years isn't really that much of a gap between ages, and Albus only received his Apparition license when he was twenty or so? Must have been a slow learnerAuthor's Response: yeah i know what you mean, it seems to be lacking in something. I will try and find some time and emotion to flood it with.
thanks for the review and the points you have said. Report Review
This is absolutely beautiful. Thank you for doing justice to such a hard subject. My best friend lost her daughter before we could know her and see her beautiful face but we think of her when ever something reminds us of her. I can't imagine how it will be for my friend when she has another child, hopefully to term, and explain Melly to them but I loved this story. Thank you darling and keep writing.Author's Response: i'm glad you liked it, i have wanted to write something like this for a while. Report Review
Gideon Remus is a nice name :)Author's Response: thanks, i played around with other names for a while but then I remembered Ginny's uncles...I thought it was appropriated really. Report Review
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