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Review #1, by baletgir If I Die Young

10th January 2012:
First of all, I LOVE "If I die young", its such a sweet, yet sad, song. I find the whole premise of this to be interesting. I think that the song unfortunately detracts from your writing, but that's probably just me since I am not a fan of the concept of a song-fic.

I liked this, but one thought struck me fairly early on, and I could not get it out of my mind, so that kind of made me a bit lost in my reading. What that thought was that who is Draco married to? Lily who? Lily Potter, as in Harry's daughter? First of all, aren't the generations a bit off then? And secondly, is Isabella is Lily's daughter that makes her Harry and Ginny's Granddaughter, thus she is a part of the Weasley family, as is Adam, which means their relationship is incestuous. They are related in other words. I'm not comfortable with that, and I actually believe it to be against HPFF's TOS. You might want to check on that.

I wish I could give you a fuller, more detailed review, but that little fact really kept me from fully reading your story. It was also very confusing at times, for a single chapter fic you introduced a lot of names in a short amount of time. And those names weren't canon, which made it all the more difficult. I'm not telling you to rigidly follow the epilogue, I enjoy seeing people have more children, but for this, I don't believe it worked.

Good luck writing!
:)BaletGir

Author's Response: No this Lilly, is a different character...I think at one point if you continue to read I do some where say that Lilly is Hermione Granger adoptive sister I think I use the word Aunt and explain-but her full name Lillian Jane Granger Malfoy not Lily Potter or Harry's daughter Lily. I hate how J.K spells Lilly because I have seen with other writers who use the two 'L' version of this name people either think first hand it is Harry's mother Lily Potter or his daughter Lily and to stop that confustion I put two "LL" and not one "L" to show that it is not either but another character. So thus going back to where you thought they are in the same family which they are not blood related as I said Lillian is the adoptive sister of Hermione making it all right for a relationship between a Weasley and a Malfoy fine and not incestuous at all!

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Review #2, by christine If I Die Young

1st September 2011:
This was so beautiful made.
I love this song, and I cried when I first heard it.
It's so sad. I cried so much that I almost could't see the computer, but it was totally worth it!
Love your work. 10/10

Author's Response: Awe!! I am glad you enjoyed it as much as I did!! It is truly a beautiful song and I intened for this to possably be a tear jurker (cause I cried every line writing this piece) Thanks for the review!!
~~~Kaitlyn!


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Review #3, by Sirra If I Die Young

27th August 2011:
I love that song and it reminds me of snape and lily.

Author's Response: I agree I love this song but I am rather new to the idea of Snape and Lily being together!!

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Review #4, by NaidatheRavenclaw If I Die Young

6th August 2011:
First of all, let me say that I absolutely ADORE this song! It was a beautiful choice for this songfic!
I have to admit though, I was a little confused with all the characters. Like Draco and Lilly... That took me a while to figure out and such, because it isn't canon, and the two names are just so different to me. Maybe just try and clear that up a bit at the beginning.
Other than that, I think it was a gorgeous songfic! Your descriptions and imagery were simply amazing. I love the attention you paid to all the little minor details. It really made this stand out for me.You really have a way with words, because this story was just so perfectly written.
Really though, an amazing job on this :D
-NaidatheRavenclaw, Ravenclaw

Author's Response: Thank you sooo much, it took a lot for me to write this because every other line I was in tears!! Yeah a lot of people have trouble with the Lilly and Draco thing because they think it is Lily, Harry's mom, but she is completely different from her in every espect!! I am gald you enjoyed it!!
~~Kaitlyn Malfoy aka Dracosfan~~~


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