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Review #1, by Ydnas Odell Teddy, Lily and Letters

2nd August 2011:
This is wondeful. I wonder if they reallly went to that field to play Quidditch or wheather they are hiding a darker secret? Hmn. Well done!

Author's Response: We'll have to see. :) And thank you for the review.

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Review #2, by Ydnas Odell Footprints in the Night

31st July 2011:
This is quite fun! Great characterizations. I wonder whatg you have in store?

This story works well, but is a little bland in the sense that the writing is very restrained. Try to be a little more poetical, especially with the opening paragraph.

Writings more fun that way.

Author's Response: Thank you and I'll try my best. I plan on going back a rewriting the first chapter or my "introduction" to the story but I don't know when that'll be. Hopefully, after I get the plot more set in stone. :)

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Review #3, by Alysea Footprints in the Night

24th July 2011:
I like what you have so far. I find it interesting that you put Albus in Slytherin. The chapter could be a bit longer, but depends on what length of a story you are aiming for. You add a good amount of details, with out over doing it, or not detailing enough. Good work, I look forward to reading more. =)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I was kind of worried about the length of the first few chapters I have but they do get longer I promise. It goes from about 700 words to 3000 in the more recent chapters, just give it a little time. I hope that means the plot is deleloping and not that I'm getting too many details. :)

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Review #4, by Marcus White Footprints in the Night

23rd July 2011:
good but short id like a chapter to be just that a chapter but other than that it was good

Author's Response: Thank you, I was worried about the length but the more recent chapter, that are not out yet, are a lot longer than this one. I kept wanting to add more but decided against it. I really don't know why but I hope when the newer chapters are out they will be more chapter-like. :)

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Review #5, by NextGenna14 Footprints in the Night

23rd July 2011:
I loved this, wonderful first story!!! :)

Author's Response: Thank you! :) I was kind of worried and I hope the plot devlops okay.

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