Wow Kali, this is so striking and fantastic. It's a very dark fic, almost the the point where you start to feel discomfort as you read it, but in the best way possible. It's just written very raw-ly. I particularly enjoyed the last two paragraphs and I also kind of like the fact that drugs are mentioned in this because as big of a deal it is in our world, I feel like people fail to mention or explore them when it comes to Harry Potter. Great piece!

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Beautifully and creepily written. I can tell you've read Poe.

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This was creepy and shiver-inducing. You did a really wonderful job with the second person narrative - it's really very tricky but you definitely pulled it off. So congratulations on that! It added to the atmosphere and mystery of it all.

It really does make me want to shiver, all of it. It's sort of desperate and horrible and terrifying all at the same time, if that makes sense. And in the end, you can't help but feel sorry for Gabrielle, who could have probably done a lot more, but in the end, dies with no respect, really.

The description was excellent. I loved the different adjectives that were used to describe Gabrielle - it worked very well stylistically and for painting a picture in your mind about her life.

I really enjoyed this. It was very well done - great job!

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