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Review #1, by Frankie05 The darkness around her

10th August 2015:
Wow,

This is so brilliantly written. I love the narrative and the yearning for something better and the pain. You so described the pain in a tangible way, I could feel it from the words. It actually hurt.

"She couldn't help him heal his scars, when her own were still wide open and aching." Literary genius I tell you. This line was so brilliant.

I think you could have touch a bit more on Pansy's scars. The little glimpse gives you nothing, while we know pretty much all of Draco's backstory and pain, but we are unaware of her issues.

I also noticed some typos, subject verb conjugation issues, and some flow but it wasn't anything too noticeable.

I think the story was great. It made me feel something, and it was very poetic. And it was very sad. Keep up the good work :)

Frankie

Author's Response: Thank you very much :D

This is an old story of mine, and I'm glad you liked it. I enjoyed writing it.

The grammar is something I'm working on, english is not my first language :)

Thank you again for taking the time to write a review!

-Ida


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Review #2, by NataliieW The darkness around her

10th February 2013:
that was so sad :(( well done 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!

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Review #3, by xtinjsc The darkness around her

9th August 2011:
I was quite impressed with how you managed to keep the name of the characters out until the very last line. A name can really do wonders in a story, no? I was intrigued the whole time about her identity and what she was talking about, but when it was revealed that the story was in Pansy's point of view, the whole story seemed to unfold on its own and everything finally made sense.

There were lots of really simple and powerful lines here that stood out to me the most. For example: For he would die, that was his task, to fail and die.

I suppose she was talking about Draco there? I could be wrong. :P But that line was beautiful - short, brief and simple, yes - but still striking. Very nice. Overall, it was a quick and interesting read for me, so thank you!

xtinjsc (Hufflepuff)

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

I kept her name out if it on purpose, and hoped for that effect. But on this site the name of the characters is written under the storyinfo sadly. So most people read and know it before they start reading the story.

It is Draco, yes. This is set in his 6th year. And with his task of killing Dumbledore on his shoulders.

If even Harry noticed that Draco was different this year, his firnds MUST have known and they must be really worried about him.

Thank you again for the review!


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Review #4, by Spaz The darkness around her

14th July 2011:
That was extremely sad, but really good. :)

Author's Response: Thank you :)

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Review #5, by Iloenchen The darkness around her

14th July 2011:
Oh, this was good. I think I might have liked it a bit better if you had mentioned already in the beginning who this was about (if I hadn't known from the summary, I wouldn't have understood) but I love how you managed to capture Pansy's emotions and also how you described the dark mark - that part was brilliant.

Well done!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!
It was on purpose I didn't say right at the beginning who it was. I wanted people to wonder (not that that is possible on here with the summary)

I think Pansy isn't given enough credit in the books. No one is that shallow, a person must have more to them. And that was what I tried to show about her.

Thank you for the review!


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