Hello again from Santa! My sleigh seems to have sped up a little- probably because this story is so very good.
I have to say I found this chapter, and Ron's letter to his mother, fascinating. I imagine Ron might have found it hard to deal with, this hero that his parents had told him of, turning out to be a small, relatively normal boy. I think that the letter was a fantastic way to express this, as it really showed it in a 'words left unsaid' kind of way. I liked it.
I also thought that the little details you included we're wonderful; these moments that I imagine would happen, that were not needed in the books, but create such a full universe.
Hermione's interlude also made me laugh- particularly Ron writing about her in his letter!
I can't wait till you publish the next ( that autocoeected to best- i don't know how you could top this chapter, but I'm sure you will!) chapter,
The most elusive and secret Santa!Author's Response: had a really hard time writing this chapter. I am a ridiculously sentimental and sappy person and I had to keep pulling back and reminding myself that Ron is not like that. He's not going to write a sappy, insightful letter about the joys of friendship...especially not at age 11. So hopefully this seemed kind of realistic.
I'm glad you liked Hermione's cameo. I mostly wrote it because I wanted to give Ron an excuse to write about her in his letter (I don't think he would have thought to write about her otherwise). Though, part of me thinks that Hermione, having read all about Harry, would find him fascinating and (similarly to Ron) want to become his friend. She just doesn't quite know how to go about doing that yet.
Thanks again for leaving these lovely reviews. I really do appreciate it :) I am hoping to continue working on this story and get more chapters up at some point. I hope you'll check back and continue reading.
Santa returns- with dodgy wifi, and an unending wish to give you some gifts. She's very sorry that she had been a bad Santa- perhaps Rudolph went missing?
This chapter was very fun! I loved seeing the platform scene from Ron's point of view. I keep saying it, but to me this story is so original! I love stories told from Ron's point of view, as he is one of my favourite characters. Somehow i can never bring myself to write him (probably because in many ways, we are quite similar), so it's lovely to see someone else provide such a realistic view inside his head for me.
The only thing I can say even vaguely negative about this chapter is two fold- I thought that, similarly to the last chapter, it was a bit short! I think that maybe you could of extended it a little bit more by, perhaps, writing a little about the Weasleys before they got to the platform.
I enjoyed the fact that Ron didn't recognise Harry at all- that he didn't even guess who Harry was. This not only tied in nicely to JK's canon, it also fitted beautifully with yours. Molly and Arthur's constant assertations that Harry was in a happy, loving family probably would have thrown him off a small, scrawny boy who was all on his own, even if the physical characteristics pointed otherwise.
Another wonderful chapter,
Santa!!Author's Response: Ron is one of my favorite characters as well, and probably my favorite one to write. I think he gets a lot of flack in fanfiction (mostly becuase of Dramione), but I think he's awesome, and try to write him as such. I really appreciate the nice things you said about his characterization.
Ron has unrealistic expectations of who and what Harry is. While he understands (at some level) that Harry is an 11 year old boy like himself, he hasn't /really/ grasped that idea. In his head, he still sees Harry as this big, strong, superhero type. I can only compare it to the first time that I watched the Chamber of Secrets movie. At the ending, when Dan Radcliffe pulling out the sword and fought that giant snake, I couldn't help but think 'Holy crap...Harry's only 12 years old..." Yes, I always knew that, but it never really registered until I saw tiny little Dan on screen.
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(Sorry I'm being a bit dippy- I'm working hard on your last present and I keep forgetting to post these- I did them a while ago all ready to post on the 24th, and /well/ that didn't go too well.)
Ho ho ho, Santa is back. And ready to roll on your lovely story!
I thought it was fantastic how you managed to get at the time gap using your third person narration, instead of writing 'five years later' or the date or something at the top. It really helped the narrative flow.
I also very much liked the part about Ron's sibling thoughts; I never really thought about him not being paired of with another of them, but I suppose its true that he doesn't really naturally have a play mate. I can vouch that younger sisters aren't to fab, and they always ruin your games (at least in my experience ;))
I notice that your chapters are quite short- it's not necessarily a bad thing, although I do like your writing, and its a pity to have to finish so soon, particularly as my wifi is quite temperamental, so I can't always move onto the next chapter immediately.
Like the last chapter, your final paragraph was extremely good. It created forshadowing for those who had not read any of the books, or seen the films. (Though I doubt they'd be on hpff if this were the case. I suppose that brings me to say that I honestly think these could stand alone, as an original fiction.) On the other hand, it's not only an interesting perspective, but a good laugh for those ho have!
I hope you have a wonderful 2013,
Santa!!Author's Response: Younger sisters always ruin everything. It's a fact of life. My little sister (for example) lost/chewed on/ate/damaged every single board game I ever owned as a child. Granted, I'm sure my older brother would have some things to say about me, so I should probably watch it ;)
Anyway, thanks for another lovely review :) I do tend to write really short chapters. It's something I'm trying to work on: adding more detail and description.
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Well hello- apologies for the lateness. Between the archives and my Internet access, I haven't been able to get much in. Anyway, hohoho, I'm here with a few little gifts!
This was fantastic and cute, and lovely! I adore the Weasleys, and this was such an adorable portrayal of them. Arthur telling Ron about Harry and the war reminded me of the way my grandfather used to tell his war stories to me- abridged, and just like that! It was very realistic, and I thought it was great that it was Arthur, rather than Molly, telling Ron, as Molly is usually the only one shown with the kids.
The last paragraph made me smile, too! The opening line was also fantastic, really, it sort of set the scene for the whole chapter, but it was trés hilarious too. I can just imagine Molly saying it hehe.
I also really thought you portrayed Ron well. He seemed vet realistic for his age, not too young or too old. I think many fanfiction authors have trouble portraying younger children, so you did very well there.
Merci Beacoup, and Merry Christmas, and Happy New Year,
The elusive and secret Santa.Author's Response: Speaking of lateness...sorry it has taken me so horribly long to respond to these reviews. Thank you so much for leaving them and for being my Secret Santa *hugs*
I really love the Weasleys, so this scene was so much fun to write. Little Ron was especially fun. I haven't written a whole lot little kids, but I have done quite a bit of babysitting in my day, so that might have come into play when writing how little Ron spoke and acted. I'm glad you enjoyed the "abridged" version of Harry's story. I wasn't sure how well I had written that. It was a bit trickier than I anticipated.
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Well, this was adorable! I have something of a soft spot for the Weasleys ...who am I kidding? My *soul* is ginger and freckled. I love them. And this little story was just so Weasley-y! Ickle Ron is just the best. You portray him beautifully here - he's cheeky and loving and a *little bit* difficult... I could see that he would become the Ron we know so well.
Your characterization of Molly and Arthur was just lovely. They always have time for each of their children, and are clearly just a fantastic team. The sloppy kiss Ron lands on Molly made me melt a little, and I bet it did the same to her! Your portrayal of Arthur was just as adorable as that of his son.
It's pretty cool to see a moment that's so often implied - magical children growing up knowing Harry's name - particularly with the child in question being Ron! It's a dark story to have to tell a child, but you/Arthur handled it beautifully.
This line made me smile: "there were most certainly a large number of families who would line up to take care of the boy who defeated You-Know-Who" - it's only a matter of a few years before Arthur and his wife welcome Harry into the fold!
I'm intrigued as to what the other stories here are about... really enjoyed this! It warmed me up on a cold December evening :)
Athene xoAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for this review! I apologize for not responding sooner.
I love the Weasleys, too, and writing little Ron was just so much fun. I'm glad you liked him.
Ok, this is why I love reviews, because it is so interesting (to me at least) to get alternative viewpoints on stories. I always thought that line was kind of sad, because, although it's true, it's not what happens. Harry doesn't end up going to a nice wizarding family, instead he ends up with the Dursleys. You gave it a much more positive spin. I like that :)
Any time you'd like to read the other chapters, you are more than welcome (even if you don't get a chance to review them.) There aren't many up yet and they're all pretty short.
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I CAN'T BREATHE UNDER ALL THE ADORABLE - OH MY GOODNESS.
I really liked this idea before I even started reading, and young Ron is SO perfect! The little conversations between Molly and Arthur and the endless "why" questions made this unbearably amazing. I felt like I was really just sitting in the Weasley household doing nothing more than putting kids to sleep, and this ordinary moment happened. BUT IT WAS NOT ORDINARY BECAUSE OF REASONS. AHH BRILLIANCE THERE IS TOO MUCH. In all seriousness, I loved how this was such a simple premise, but really the start of one of my favorite friendships in the series.
I liked how you framed it for a child too, and how Molly was still hurt from the things that happened. I know she wasn't really a big part of this, but I thought you made her seem like such a caring, but still hurt, woman who wasn't just the most amazing mother ever. I've always admired her, but the little glimpses of her endless patience and compassion made her shine in this.
One thing I wasn't sure about in this was how the time lines worked. I know the story started with Voldemort's rise before Harry was born, but I didn't see if Arthur said that Harry and Ron were the same age? I don't know if it's insignificant or out to make the story more exciting, but I noticed it and figured it was my only excuse for concrit since this was perfect. :P
I could see everything really well in my head - the crossing the arms and the ridiculous hand gestures that Arthur would make as he went along with all the KABOOMs and the fear that he had to live in, and still lived in, for so long.
This was so beautiful, and I hope to read the other bits of their friendship. :)
AnnieAuthor's Response: Sorry it's taken me so long to reply to your review.
Thanks so much for all of your super sweet comments. :* I really like Ron and Harry's friendship as well. I'm glad you liked little Ron. He was a lot of fun to write :)
I'm not sure that I really understand what you were saying about the timeline...sorry...
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Really adorable. I love the way you portrayed Ron's hero worship developing into true friendship for Harry. He's seeing him as a person, and not a celebrity. Great job with that. You write them as children really well - I mean, they really seem to be children. A lot of stories I see on the archive are nominal 11 year olds who talk like 18 year olds. Anyway, fantastic job, you talented thing you, and I love this story! So glad you posted a new chapter!Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading this chapter and for leaving a review! I've been so terrible at updating that I'm pretty sure everyone forgot this story existed, so it's really nice to hear from you :)
I really love writing young Ron, so I'm glad you think that I'm doing an ok job of making them seem age appropriate. I am hoping to continue this story, and went so far as to actually making an outline, so maybe something will come of it after all.
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Oh, Ron is so adorable. This was such a cute little story. "Harry Potter - The bedtime story for Ron version". xD Author's Response: Writing little Ron was so much fun. I really need to do more with pre-Hogwarts Ron. He really is a cute little kid :P Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
I don't think I can say how much I enjoyed this story! I was just popping in to read your entry for the 'Ronald Weasley Challenge'.
I love how it started with 'Babbity Rabbity' and Ron being read a bedtime story - it seemed such a realistic routine that you can imagine Molly fulfilling. The idea of Arthur deciding to tell Ron about Harry Potter as a bedtime story is brilliant; and I loved how Molly scolded him immediately. The characterisation of both of them was spot on! It really was a fantastic first chapter!
I think you've left a great age gap between each chapter; you can clearly see Ron developing but still remaining as part of the character we all know and love.
At first I thought Fred and George were bullying Ron, as is to often portrayed on HPFF, but I really liked how instead they were playing with him. Especially playing 'Harry Potter beats You-Know-Who'; the way Ron is shown in PS (or SS), it's obvious that HP has been a part of Ron's childhood. You showed this brilliantly!
The idea of Ron wanting a twin to play with, and offering to share his room with Harry is so cute! I've always thought Ron would feel left out; his options being Percy and Ginny. Molly handled the situation in true Molly character! Your characterisation really is spot on! :)
I think my favourite part of your story is the relationship between the twins and ron; it's often portrayed as them picking on Ron (which.. is true) but you've also clearly shown the brotherly bond that's also shown in the series.
I really loved this and would love to read more! Are you planning on carrying on? Hopefully the results will be up soon (I've just got to review every entry first! :P). Keira :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I just loved your challenge (especially since I love writing Ron and really hate when people turn him into a terrible person in fanfics). I'm so excited to get second place! Thank you so much! :D
I'm really glad that you liked the family dynamics and thought that they fit in well with what we know of the Weasleys. I just love that family, so I try really hard to keep them as close to canon as I can.
The twins are constantly pranking and teasing everyone, but they are never really cruel (with the exception of Umbridge and probably the Slytherins...). I very much see them having the typical "No one messes with our brother but us" mentality. They can be really good brothers when necessary.
I am hoping to continue this with missing moments scattered throughout the seven books, but I'm having a hard time narrowing down what to write and figuring out how to go about it. Plus, that means that it'll soon leave the realm of cutesy little Ron, which is a shame, because he was so much fun to write :P
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A beautiful finish to a beautifully written short stories. I love every single one and Ron just got older and oler and now I'm missing the Ron from the first chapter :( However this was beautifully written and something you should be very, very proud of. You are one of my favorite authors on this site and this is the reasn why, you're writing is just beautiful and very nicely written. This was a perfect finish to a perfect 5 reviews I have bestowed upon your fine self. Thank you so much for entering my contest and well done on second place.
All the best,
Snoopy xAuthor's Response: I'm hoping to keep writing more of this story, though Ron is getting older, so the cuteness will have to go in later chapters.
Thank you so much for all of your reviews! They've been really great to read, and I appreciate you taking the time to leave them all. Thank you also for the extremely sweet remarks you have made about my stories and my writing. It really makes my day. :* Report Review
aww Ron's so cute! I love it, I just love how cute you've portrayed him and how eager he is to meet Harry (good thing they became best friends then eh) I love how you included all the brothers and no one wants to play with Ron anymore. It was a really cute idea that Ron wants Harry to be his brother even though in the end they do end up being best friends and Harry was like his brother as he was always staying over at the Burrow. This was a really cure idea and I loved it from the bottom of my heart. If this was all real I would be hugging Ron right now and I wouldn’t want to let go :3
A very sweet story, well done
Snoopy xAuthor's Response: I love writing Ron, and writing little Ron was even more fun :) I'm glad you liked him (and his ridiculous amount of cuteness).
I'm glad you liked the idea. We know that Ron has heard the Harry Potter story before he ever went to Hogwarts. He's also got a bit of a tendency toward hero worship (Viktor Krum, anyone?) So I figured this was the 8-year old version of that. I'm glad you wanted to hug Ron. I'd rather like to hug him myself :P Report Review
See, I read 'This Ends Today' and I loved it, and you've got lots of stories, so now I'm reading lots of stories :D
I especially likeed 'abridged means a bedtime story for Ron'
That made me giggle, although I'm not sure that abridged is the right word for what you mean... But I'm not sure what the right word is so my complaint is null and void anyway
~ Alice xAuthor's Response: Thank you! It makes me really happy that you liked 'This Ends Today' enough to want to read some of my other stories. Yay! Warm fuzzy feeling :D (Plus, you left this review on my birthday, so it's like an extra bonus ;))
You know, that is an excellent point that I never really thought about. Abridged really isn't the right word, is it? It's more like a simplified, children's version of the story. Oh well. I guess Arthur was too tired to be thinking clearly ;) Thanks for pointing it out! It's always helpful when readers point out errors, especially when they do it in a nice way. I'll probably leave it though, because I like the bridge line too :P
Thanks again for continuing to read my stories and for leaving this review!
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Ah I fail, I am so, SO sorry for how long it took me to get to reviewing this! school bites a bit. ><
This was just as adorable as the first two, though! I think you capture them well when it comes to characterization, and though it felt like the chapter went by much too quickly it was an enjoyable read! ^^ And I love, love, loveee that he met Harry and didn't even realize it! Hopefully shows Ron his hero is quite like himself!
I also particularly liked Fred's teasing of Ron, the 'worried your hero won't like you'. It kinda makes me really realize just how prominent Harry was in his life before they even met! And it seems so typical of one of the twins to tease about that! hahah.
Lovely chapter and hope to see an update soon! sorry again for how long it took me to review! D=
-CaitiAuthor's Response: You don't fail! I'm super glad that you got an opportunity to come back and review this chapter. I know how real life can get a bit out of hand, so thanks for making time to read and reveiw :D
I know this chapter is a bit brief, but it's a pretty short period of time, right? :P (Bad excuse!) I actually had a bit of trouble with following the 'you can only quote three lines per chapter' rule, so I had to cut a bit to ensure it followed the ToS. I think I'm going to be sticking mostly to missing moment type chapters in the future so it hopefully won't be such a problem :P
Thanks again for reading and reviewing :) I'm really glad that you got a chance to come back and check out this chapter. I'll try to have another chapter up before too long. Report Review
ICKLE RONNIEKINS! So precious! I don't think I've ever read a story where Ron starts out so young. I love it!
The first chapter nearly killed me with cute! How Ron said " stowy," I thought I was literally going to explode from the preciousness! The funny thing is, I don't like small children that much, but reading about them and seeing them in movies always makes them seem ten million times cuter!
Ron asking his mum to adopt Harry...again, TOO MUCH CUTE! I pretty much acted like Mrs. Weasley when I read that, only I couldn't actually hug him :(. Again, not that fond of kids, but Ronnie...SQUEE!
Such a cliffhanger! Well, not really...oh, what am I saying - THAT'S THE BIGGEST CLIFFHANGER EVER!!! I can't wait to read what happens next. Actually, I do KNOW what happens next, but what I mean is that I can't wait to read about Ron's side of things. I really hope you update this soon, as it's so squee-inducing! Really, the cuteness in this story is the equivalent of Avada Kedavra - except, you know...cuter.Author's Response: Aw, thanks :) I'm glad you like this story so far :P I like small children in small doses. You know, play with them, then send them home ;)
Ron is one of my favorite characters to write, and writing little Ronnie was so much fun :P I highly recommend it.
I'm not sure where the story is going from here. With the forum rule about only quoting three lines of dialogue, the scene on the train might be tricky, so I might just jump ahead to the sorting.
It's not /really/ a cliffhanger! We all know what happens next :P I'll try to get an update up before too long, but life has been crazy and I'm going to be starting NaNo soon, so we'll see what happens.
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Oh wow! This has been brilliant so far and I cannot wait for more!! I especially loved the part in the previous chapter with Ron dressing up as Harry, it was so sweet!!
Please continue with this story, I love all your pieces and am eagerly awaiting the next instalment!! 10/10Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) I'm honestly a bit stuck with this story at the moment, but I fully intend to continue working on it. I'm really glad that you are enjoying the story so far.
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I apologise in advance for the oncoming squeal.
This was seriously SO cute! I myself have never been able to write a child's Pov nicely, and while reading this, I was squealing all the way through. Li'l Ron is so adorable! I loved the way Arthur told the story. 'Abridged means a bedtime story for Ron'. Haha, that made me chuckle. It was really nice the way you told us how Ron came to know about Harry, and how he wants to meet him and be a hero like him. Lovely characterisation! I especially love the way you potrayed Ron! (I think I said that before, but, oh well...)
I can't wait to read the rest of the fic. A really enjoyed reading this. Just so you know- I was having a really bad day, and reading this fic made my afternoon. Seriously. :)Author's Response: Teehee :P No apology necessary. I have a tendency to squee over random bits of cuteness myself. I'm glad you liked this and thought that lil Ron was characterized well. I think he's my favorite character to write, no matter what age.
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad this story was able to cheer you up :) I hope you'll get a chance to continue reading.
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Singularity: You're setting an elegant table for what will be a great main dish of a story. I can see how you're posing the trials and tribulations of a young wizard like Ron who views himself as quite ordinary but, like Ginny, has an intense desire to meet and know the "Boy Who Lived" whose young reputation is already legend. But its because of Ron's unassuming nature and his humble way of life that he and Harry will form a bond of friendship that will survive the inevitable challenges that await their destinies. Your writing style is so engaging. The dialogue, sweet where it needs to be and tart when it has to be. So creative. This story is going to be a fun read, I can feel it. I hope you're having as much fun writing it. I know you can be very self critical sometimes. (OMG, I"m starting to sound like Luna! Better cut that out...;>). Keep this story going. It will be great. Like the rest of your stories.
I'm getting help for the Forums. I'll let you know soon. Just been too busy to make it happen.
Anyway, great job! Very well done. PWAuthor's Response: Hey PW :) Thanks for the vote of confidence, it's very much appreciated. Self-critical? Me? Never! *cough* Well...maybe once in awhile :P
It has been very fun to write so far. I'm a bit stuck at the moment, but I think I just need to read through the books again and decide which scenes to write so it doesn't become redundant (or overly sentimental).
Luna's awesome! Everyone loves Luna, so feel free to sound like her all you want :) She's a truth teller and everyone needs a truth-teller or two in their lives.
I'm really going to try to continue this story. It's my goal to get a few longer ones up at some point in the near future.
Thanks for reading and reviewing, PW! I really look forward to my reviews, and they absolutely make my day :)
Pfft I still love how much Ron idolizes Harry as a child. I do have to wonder if this is really how he might have felt before he actually became friends with him. It would be nice to become friends with your childhood idol, after all! Like a dream come true and whatnot.
Silly Ron. Babies can't use wands! Oh and speaking of Ron, I'm glad to see that he has more dialogue in the first two chapters than from what I read in the third. Characterization is as good as always. Glum little Ronnie just breaks my heart, though. Poor kid.
Another sweet one-shot! I really enjoy reading these :)Author's Response: That's exactly what spurred this story. What if it wasn't an accident that Ron walked into that compartment and sat with Harry? I mean, we know from canon that Ron knew full-well who Harry was before he sat with him.
Also, Ron's always been the kind of person who is drawn to fame and popularity. In GoF, he was awestruck by Krum and tried to figure out how to get his autograph (right up until the Yule Ball at least). I figured once he learned that he and Harry were the same age, he'd want nothing more than to meet him.
Anyway, I'm glad that you're enjoying this so far and that you like the way I've written Ron.
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Ahaha yes! Babbity-Rabbity--Ron's favorite story. Wow. I really like toddler Ron here. The line about the bridge just killed me! So cute! It's funny to think of Harry being the subject of bedtime stories for children, but I guess something like that would have happened since he was so famous and celebrated from a young age. I really like the way you're handling this series of one-shots so far.
Again, characterization is perfect from what I can see. You know your Weasleys!
This one-shot was overall bittersweet, I think. Sure, it was sweet, warm and cuddly with a family telling their child a bedtime story, but the part when Ron asked if Harry's parents came back and his dad said no was so sad! Poor Harry...Author's Response: Thank you so much for this! Your last paragraph is exactly what I was trying to get across. Yes, it's squishy and fluffy, but it's not really the truth. There's a lot more to Harry's story, and it doesn't really have a happy ending (at least not yet).
I'm glad you liked toddler Ron :P I love Ron and he's fun to write, even as a four year old :P
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Agnes from the forums, bringing your review! I will be reviewing the other two chapters, too, but started with chapter three since you put particular emphasis on it.
Ohhh, I like this. It's short and sweet and handles Ron's feelings very well, I think. I've never thought about how Ron felt about attending Hogwarts with Harry Potter--and the hero take is very interesting. Poor Ron, already met his childhood hero and didn't even realize it!
I think the characterization for all of the Weasleys is pretty much spot-on. The only thing that really bothered me was that even though it was from Ron's point of view, he didn't have much dialogue in the entire piece aside from a couple of 'shut up's. Characterization can show through a character's dialogue, and is just as important as internal thought. Ron always struck me as a vocal type of character, too, never afraid to speak his mind. Don't get me wrong, that doesn't mean his characterization is off or anything. I would just have liked to see some more speech from him is all!
And I think this is the only error I found: "As the twins switching to mocking Percy"--I believe should be "As the twins switched to mocking Percy."Author's Response: Hey there :) Thanks so much for agreeing to review this! I really appreciate it!
There are a couple reasons I didn't give Ron much dialogue. Firstly, I was trying to keep it as canon as possible. We see much of this scene in canon, and Ron basically only says 'shut up'. He might have one or two other lines, but in the interest of keeping with the TOS for HPFF, I left those out. Secondly, I figured Ron was so focused on finding Harry, that he didn't pay much attention to what was going on around him, so didn't really have anything to say. When people get nervous, they often get quiet, and that's kind of what I was trying to do here. He'll definitely be a more vocal character in other chapters :)
Despite that, I'm glad you thought the characterizations were all right.
Thanks for pointing that mistake out. I went back and corrected it :)
Thanks again for taking the time to review all three of these chapters! I really appreciate it :)
I love the idea of this chapter. The Weasleys playing Harry Potter games is something I've never really thought of, but definitely something that young children in the wizarding world would do.
I did feel sorry for Ron when Fred and George left him to play on his own. Ginny is no good to play with; she's a girl! :P But Ron's suggestion to his mum to let him live at his home is so adorable! I love that Molly's suggestion that he'll probably meet Harry at Hogwarts turns out to be truer than they ever would have thought. :)
orderofthephoenix (Ravenclaw)Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you liked the idea of this chapter. It kind of popped into my head as a result of something I had written in my first ever fanfic. Also, it's based a little on my own experiences playing super heroes as a kid :P
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Awww, I love stories about the Weasley children when they were very young. Arthur telling his son a bedtime story (instead of Molly) makes for such a cute fic and to top it off, it was Harry's story!
Molly's part where she insisted on an abridged version is spot on. Not that Arthur would tell his son the completely truthful story. And ickle Ronnie thought he was talking about bridges which was great. That line kept Ron in character excellently. The abridged version was perfect. You managed to keep the story the same, but simplified it down enough for a four year old to listen to. Voldemort was scary enough to be the baddie in the story, but not enough to scare Ron.
Ron's thoughtfulness shone through when he asked what had happened to Harry after defeating You-Know-Who. To me, that just shows what a great character and personality Ron has. :)
orderofthephoenix (Ravenclaw)Author's Response: Thanks for reading! I'm so glad that you liked this story, especially the bridge-less abridged version of Harry's story.
Ron may have a lot of flaws, but he's got a good heart. And he's an adorable four year old :P
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More adorably tiny freckled Ron! It really does suit Ron to be the one who keeps wanting more, being the youngest brother. All those brothers and so much to live up to, and yet still feeling so alone with no proper playmate. Sisters don't count, that's right Ronnie. Ginny's no fun anyway XP She can be erm, Nagini!
Baww, I can barely remember reading about little-first-year-Harry but this is making me nostalgic again. It really does make me love what a great sort of friendship the two made eventually, you know -- saving the world and whatnot 8D
- justonemorefic, RavenclawAuthor's Response: I know right? Who would want a sister? Yuck! I may have modeled that attitude on my older brother's attitude toward his (super adorable) little sister ;)
I love Harry and Ron's relationship. It always seemed really real to me. I mean, it wasn't perfect, and they got into fights and stopped talking, but they love each other like brothers and would do anything for each other.
Hopefully more chapters will be coming soon. Just have to get over my writer's block. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
EEP! Tiny Ron! I love tiny Weasley stories. Bonus points for bedtime stories. The story of Harry Potter to Ron? Hah! I don't think that's ever ever been done before. Cute little Ronnykins thinking it's a story about bridges. Gold.
Aww, I love how he told it. I think the abridged version is quite succinct and has plenty of explosions (which are really all that are needed). The innocence just makes it all the more sadder with what we readers know: of how Harry became an orphan -- an unwanted one at that, where he lived. But the ending sealed it for me. So cute and perfect! It's like a kitten next to a fireplace level fuzziness!
♥ justonemorefic, RavenclawAuthor's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) I think more people should write tiny Weasley stories. There is so much room for adorable fluffiness! :D I'm glad you enjoyed this story and the idea behind it. Report Review
This was fantastic. Really, really incredible. You got those characters just right. I love that Bill taught Ron how to play chess, and how touched Molly is with Ron's idea. But mostly, I love how Ron's little dream actually came true. So sweet. ~GWAuthor's Response: Thanks, Georgia :) I'm glad you enjoyed this. It was fun to write.
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