i loved this story. It was such a delight to read :) 10/10
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ha ha ha it's so funny!
i'm laughing with tears of joy!
it was so funny when draco bit ron on the nose!
and so funny when blaise was making puking noises in the background!
excellent 10/10Author's Response: Aw. thank you! I had so much fun writing those parts! I really appreciate the review and I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :D Report Review
Cute. I liked Blaise in this too.Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
i think i love that puppyAuthor's Response: Lol. I'm glad you enjoyed it :) Report Review
haha, hilarious, love it :DAuthor's Response: Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
Aww, really good and super cute!!! I love Dramione, you know from my story. Haha and Ron... just plain idiot lol!Author's Response: Thank you! We really appreciate you reviewing! :) Report Review
aww that was really sweet. and I thought dracos thoughts were exactly how they would actually be if he was turned into a dog. it was a really good story!Author's Response: Aw! Thank you for that kind review! Report Review
I think you had a really fun idea here not any spelling/grammar mistakes and I was interested from the beginning, plus Doggie Draco is so cute in my mind lol.
I do have some friendly criticisms to leave you to ponder, but believe me, they're not that bad at all...
First, this line: '“How long did you say this would last? Me as a dog?” I asked. ' was spoken to Blaise, which Blaise responded to, but Draco was supposed to be a dog. So that was a little out of continuity.
Lastly, you didn't really need to put Draco's POV at the beginning. By the dialogue and narration, it was very clear who was talking.
But other than that the story was darling. Great job!!!
slytherinAuthor's Response: Aw thank you! We'll take those into account! We really appreciate you reviewing! Thank you! Report Review
Awh! Well I do have to hand it to you, this was definitely cute and different. ^^ However, I do feel it was rushed a bit? I think if you would have shown more of what she talked about while he was dog and what not, the ending would be all the more justified.
There was also one point that says this : 'How long did you say this would last? Me as a dog?' I asked.' but it was when Draco was already a dog, so I was confused as to how he was talking?
All in all, cute idea! I'd just consider adding a bit more to explain everything better. =)
-Caiti [Cappie on the forums]Author's Response: Thank you! We were thinking about actually turning it into a short story. I'll let you know on the forums when we change it. Report Review
Aw! I thought this was so adorable :)Author's Response: Thank you so much! There will be a sequal! Report Review
That was sweet and funny all at once. This was amazing. It went a little quickly in the end, but it was okay. Keep up your good work. This was really amazing. :)Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate you reviewing! Report Review
This is a really cute story :) A few pointers for you, just to help you out, so I hope you don't mind... Your story seemed a bit rushed... I can not see Draco or Hermione going from all that anger for one another straight into a relationship just like that. I would fill the gap more. Stretch out their time together so that it builds up to the attraction. Also, I can not see Hermione even thinking of approaching Zabini without a wand drawn. He is in Slytherin and they are enemies by house. By adding more detail and explanation to the story, you will really bring it to life. :) I really do like it, and I think you can really turn this into a cute one. Good Luck and I hope this helped some.Author's Response: Thank you. I appreciate you pointing those things out for me and I will try my best to fix the shaky areas of the story. There will be a sequal to this and maybe it'll be a short story. In the first chapter, we'll sum up the previous events and maybe explain a little to why Hermione walked up to Blaise without a wand. Thank you for the generous tips and the time you took to review. We will try our best to fix them over the next few days. Report Review
Very cute concept. I wish you dragged it out more it seemed very rushed, and I bet you could have put in ALOT more detail. I can think of so many directions you could have taken this story in. Overall though I liked it. Good job!Author's Response: Thank you. Stay tuned though. there might be a sequal coming soon. Report Review
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