Very interesting! I've always been fascinated by the Grey Lady/Bloody Baron story. I like your writing style quite a bit -- kind of a bare, austere tone, but at the same time dramatic. The one thing I would critique is the dialogue, which at times can seem a little overly-dramatic and forced. I definitely like it, and I'd love to read more!Author's Response: Yeah, dialogue is my weak point. Especially, when I'm trying to use dialogue I think people would have sounded like back in that time period. I will definitely focus on using everyday language, but at the same time make it meaningful and keep the plot moving. (Tricky business.) Thank you so much for the review. :) Report Review
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