I loved this! I love the mystery of the entire thing. I have so many ideas for who the mystery sender could have been, but I think the beauty of what you've done with this story is that it could be anyone. That way, each reader gets to chose who it was. Lovely fic! Report Review
I really really liked this piece! Must've been tricky to limit the dialogue, but I find that it works very well in this case!
I loved how you stuck so true to canon until the very end when Hermione didn't marry Ron, and I find myself wanted more information on Hermione's secret lover and how their relationship blossomed.
And obviously you kept the reader guessing from the beginning if Hermione was going to marry Ron.
I can't think of anything that needs to be changed, except maybe making it into a short story or novel!
megan2u (Ravenclaw)Author's Response: Thank you! I actually find it easier to write without dialogue, as I tend to struggle with it.
I am planning a sequel, so there will be more about Hermione's secret lover eventually :)
Thank you so much! Report Review
Wow this was really great, and I think you executed it perfectly for a challenge limiting the use of dialog. I think it shows that we can tell quite a story without dialogue, and also use dialogue in a sparing way to strike a sudden chord. Very interesting idea, too, about Hermione ending up with another man. I wonder if you have any particular idea who you would have seen her running off after? (o:
The residents of the Burrow had welcomed them both with open arms when they were eleven, and neither had ever really left.
I liked this line a lot. And I generally just loved how you took us through Hermione's eyes, seeing each of the characters, even Neville and Luna. The fairytale Fleur and Bill. Her friendship with Harry. I have to say, I am particularly and obsessively fond of Harry and Hermione's relationship, how much she gave to him, her devotion and loyalty astounds me, and makes me love Hermione so much, on top of all her cleverness and braveness. I really love the three of them - Harry, Hermione, and Ron. But my heart will always hold closer its hold on Harry and Hermione.
Maybe it was Krum, a secret love she'd harbored since her school days? Or maybe another Weasley brother no one had noticed her falling for? Or a training partner she'd worked with in her first year after the battle? (o: It's fun to think about. I, for one, am not a fan of the idea that people very simply and cleanly end up with their high school (Hogwarts) sweetheart. It happens sometimes, but not so often. Anyway, well done, I liked this a lot! And I wanted to thank you for being willing to review my story, by returning the favor. (o: Thanks for your time!Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! I'm considering writing a sequel, so I do have my ideas as to who she ran after ;)
Marrying Hogwarts sweethearts happened fairly often with the main characters in the book. Life just isn't that simple or easy. Sometimes it happens, sometimes two people knew each other at Hogwarts, sometimes they met through work. There are just far too many possibilities, the way I see it.
Thank you so much for the review! I'm still reading through your story, so you'll be hearing more from me :) Report Review
This is good. I never expected the ending. In my head, the mystery man is Viktor! It has to be.
I noticed a few small problems, nothing that distracted much from the story. Just a few places where perhaps a different word might make it seem to flow a little bit more naturally. Other than that, it was great. I really enjoyed your snapshots of the family.
Hope you win!
wit_beyond_measure3/phoenixflames19Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I'll take a look through, see what improvements I can make. Report Review
Your review intrigued me so much I had to come take a look at your author's page, and I was so excited to see that you wrote for the No Dialogue challenge, since I wasn't brave or inspired enough to ;)
This really made my mind race - and not just because of the WHO IS HERMIONE IN LOVE WITH OMG thing, but because it made me realize that dialogue is not a necessity in writing, it's more of a tool. I love that you only used the one piece of dialogue, and used it so powerfully.
I also feel like you captured all the relationships that Hermione looks back on so perfectly, especially her relationship with Ron. I'm not sure if I'm very happy with the outcome (although it doesn't make SENSE, I'm a big Hermione/Ron fan, despite myself) though..
This was really brilliant, in conclusion ;)Author's Response: Aww, you're so sweet :) I loved writing for the challenge. I've always been a fan of description in what I read, so it seemed perfect. You should give it a shot, even if it's not for the challenge! It really is just a tool, and a very important one.
I enjoyed writing about the relationships that Hermione has. I feel like the canon epilogue was rubbish in capturing the essense of the Trio and their friends/family and wanted to address that in a minor way. The big point for me, though, was the being in love/loving someone difference that I talk about in my blog. (And I'm NOT a Hermione/Ron fan, haha.)
Thank you so much, you're fantastic! Report Review
Now this makes me think. I had been really liking it because of it's awesome canoness. When I reached the ending I was like, what??? I re-read it several times, trying to see if they was anything I missed.
This mysterious ending makes me want to scream! It's like the ending of Lost. Personally, I hope that maybe Ron had a clone named Ron or something and she realized that she was marrying the fake one and ran off to see the real one! Sigh...
Results will be up August Third on my blog!Author's Response: I'm very glad that it made you think! That's what I was aiming for.
Hahaha, that could be a possibility, we don't really know who the mystery guy is ;) Perhaps Polyjuice?
Thank you for creating the challenge, it was wonderful inspiration! Report Review
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