not bad. few grammatical issues but those can be fixed xD

Author's Response: Thank you I will try to fix them!

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Aw, that was so cute! I loved how it linked so perfectly with the song every single word made me want to cry! 10/10 ;) xxx

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I tried to make it link, rather than just explain how the lyrics went, and I'm glad that my words had the power to make someone want to cry, ecen though, that may not be the best thing ever. And thank you for reading and reveiwing.

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I tipicaly don't read Song-Fic. However, I did enjoy this one quite a lot. I am going to try and find the song on the net.

You have an easily readable style.

Now, I do have some critiques. I wish you would have developed the story just a bit more in between the lyrics. I do like the way you used the last line of the lyric set to lead into the next story set but it needed to be more developed.

I really like the concept you had about Rose, this could be taken to a whole other level. And I think you could do it.

I look forward to reading more of your work.

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I do think that my writing could be greatly improved but I am still tring to do that. I am much better at papers and such, but I will take into account your critiques. Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it and I hope you find the song it is quite lovely. I will update it soon, hopefully it will be better then.

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This is beautiful. Thanks for posting.

Author's Response: Oh, my gosh! Thank you so much, I didn't think that anyone whould ever think it was beautiful. So thank you for making my day.

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