Hey, good story! I found it really interesting that you were speaking from Blaise's point of view, I've never thought about how everyone else would feel on the ball except the main protagonists. It was really sweet
Anyway, I wanted to ask you something: since you said you worried about the mistakes (don't, I make a lot myself :D), a thought passed through my mind: are you a native speaker? I'm from Bulgaria and I just wondered because we also have that name "Zora" here (if that's your real name of course :) that we could be from one place ^^ sorry if I offended you in any way, didn't really mean it :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for your rewiew. I never thought about the ball from anothers perspective either, but then I got Blaise for the challange and i thought it would be nice to have him at the ball.
i`m not a native speaker either. I`m from germany and Zora is not my first name, but my second name. I was named after a character in a childrens book, where the main character has that name and it is set in eastern europe.
I`m not offended in any way. Thank you again for reading and rewieing Report Review
Very sweet but also sad. Poor Blaise. I see him shipped with Pansy far less than I'd like to, and you did a good job with it. Great work!Author's Response: Thank you much for your review. it is the best thing to get on a bad day like the one i had today. It is the best thing that happened to me today.
i am glad you liked the story. Report Review
Well, good story! You really shouldn't worry about getting Blaise's character right or not because he never really had a personality in the original books and everyone gives him a different personality (I have seen the Emo, the playboy and the hot guy XD)
There are some typos and errors. I'll list a few up for you, but you can always get it beta-read. :)
(I can't use italics on my phone, so I will just make the words capitalized. :$)
-Why did it HAVE to be him? Instead of HAD.
-He had come TOO late. Instead of TO late
-You shouldn't have been so picky, THEN... Instead of THAN.
These are most of them I think. (I'm sorry if I'm being VERY annoying... :s)
But your story is really good and I'm not going to judge your grammar. :)
-Xxx- sweetlovelygirlAuthor's Response: Thank you for the corections. I hope it was not too annying when you read the story.
I am actually not at all annoyied of the corections. i am not a native English speaker (as you might have guessed) so I am very happy that you pointed them out. I am going to corect them as soon as I have time.
Thank you again very much.
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