This was a really great one shot! I can't believe I'm your first review on it, because I absolutely loved this! Petunia's emotions really showed through. Her longing for her sister, for things to be different, was really evident and I thought the pain was very believable. I loved the little details as well. Things like "every Halloween at midnight" and such. Those small things can make such a difference, so excellent job with that as well! You really have a way with words, which makes for an excellent story. The only one problem I had with this was the last line. I read a beautiful story, and then come to that. Sorry, but it just sounded a bit childish and rreally took away from the rest of your story. I think just getting rid of the words "so much" would fix that though. Do you see what I mean? Overall, this was a beautiful one shot! You capture emotions really well, and you should really be proud of yourself for this work. -NaidatheRavenclaw, Ravenclaw Report Review
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