The story was pretty good. I kind of got a bit confused by the potion and evil people. Btw where's andromeda?

Author's Response: Ooh... This is really embarassing, I completely overlooked her. Thanks for the review, I'll have to work on that potion bit again then. :)

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Hi! This is a really great oneshot! I completely love your characterisation of Bellatrix and Narcissa, they're both very cute but very realistic of how I picture them at the same time! Your description and prose is very easy to read and I love the addition of Bes. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! This is one of my favourite stories I've written so it makes me so happy you like it! :)

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This story is so good! You've really tied Bes in the story really well, and you've explained him well too :D I'm really sad that Bellatrix left him though :/ I'm thinking she would've grown up differently if Bes was in Hogwarts with her...oh well.

Bottom line, this is an amazing story! I'll announce the winners for the challenge when everyone has finished and submitted their stories. Thank you for participating!

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I honestly would never have thought of this story idea - I thought Bes and Bellatrix was a hard story to write, but you wrote this wonderfully! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! Bes and Bellatrix seemed hard at first, but I was surprised myself how well they fitted together. I'm so glad you like the story. Thanks for the inspiration, it was fun to write.

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