i like it:) you should really write some more!Author's Response: Thank you! I think I might, at that :) Report Review
You started off a little slow, but the ending flowed much better and you've got a good grasp on conversation.
I particularly like Drew, she's very odd and Luna-like, which is good.
There were a few small mistakes that would have been noticed had you had a beta or something, so I'd recommend getting one, and then this chapter would be near perfect :]Author's Response: Oh wow, thanks so much!
And I'm definitely considering getting one, just don't know where from, haha.
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So even though it was a little jumpy and choppy at bits, I really enjoyed the dialogue and the dynamics of the relationships of the people in your story.
Why's Dominique there? Just curious.
I liked it, so I'll be back to see how James gets on :)Author's Response: Yeah, I see what you mean.
Next chapter will tell all to do with Dominique.
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