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Review #1, by I_trusted_Snape13 chapter 1

12th June 2012:
This totes made me cry! It was so beautifully heartbreaking! Good job! I love bittersweet stories, this was brilliant!! :D

Author's Response: aw thank you! that's an awesome compliment :D glad you liked it! (:
-Relic


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Review #2, by MyMyMiss chapter 1

7th August 2011:
I must admit, I only cliked on this because Of the summary of the story!! ^.^ But I thought you still did a remarkable job on this little piece.

One Suggestion though, Perhaps break down your paragraphs? Paragraphs are great to have, especially when there lengthy, but not too lengthy. the first Paragraph really became a mouthfull and eye searcher to read and I had to stop a few times in order to get back to where I was, >.< Perhaps break it down just a little ??, x

-She closed her eyes as they started shoveling mud onto the coffin trying to stop herself from convulsing with the pain.
Lasy year I lost my Best friend, and just recently, not even a month ago, my brother died, so this story was really hard for me to read, the Death part at the start like I said drew me in, and I'm not sure why, but this part here is very realistic. It does happen, it's what people do when they watch the coffin go down or the dirt being thrown on top. Noone - unless their really brave or didn't like the person and are purely there for sticky beaks - Can watch it. And You nailed that line fair on the head.

This is a very sad one-shot, like very sad. If I wasn't such an emotional wreck right now, I would possibly make this longer but I can't and I'm sorry. :/ But all in all you did a terrific job and I'll be recommending this story!!! *Inserts hugs and hearts here*

Forum Name: MyMyMiss
House: Slytherin.

Author's Response: thank you! i'm really glad you liked it!i had hoped i got some emotion in to this story and i'm happy to see i did. i will definitely look into the paragraphs thing and see what i can do... if you do find any other parts that need re-doing or any criticism please let me know :) but again i am very happy you liked it.

i'm really sorry to hear about your best friend and your brother. i hope your doing ok.






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