4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by confusedlover Chapter 3

22nd June 2011:
very lovely.

i love the gradual plot growth with every chapter. sometimes authors attempt to have too much happen within one chapter and it makes it difficult to read. your chapters are very short, shorter than most, but you still manage to capture a fair amount of plot development and characterization within them. that is wonderful, and although i would personally like to see chapters possibly over 1000 words, you are managing well this you size right now and i am enjoying it all the same.

keep up the wonderful work! i'll be sure to watch for an update!

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Review #2, by confusedlover Chapter 2

22nd June 2011:
very lovely.

ooo...a cliffhanger of sorts at the end! that's very interesting and a touch i most certainly was not expecting. it'll change the story dramatically if the owner knows Hermione is a wizard and even more so if she is a wizard herself! i am very excited to see where you are going to take this.

your flow is continuing to impress me. i love it when stories are easily readable and this is no exception. your sentence structure is good as are your characterizations as far as i can tell. there are several grammatical and spelling errors but they can be ignored while reading and the meaning still recognizable. just figured i'd let you know.

i haven't been reading any stories as much as i used to lately but i am enjoying this greatly and can't wait to read more.

onto the next chapter!

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Review #3, by confusedlover Prologue + Chapter 1

22nd June 2011:
very lovely.

what a great start to a story and an extremely original idea too! i've seen a lot of stories on this site dealing with the time period between the war and a possible seventh year at Hogwarts but this idea is something i have not come across until now. i think you have a lot of freedom with it and can surely pull it off. so far i have greatly enjoyed your writing style; the flow of this chapter so far has been wonderful!! keep up the amazing work!

onto chapter two!

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Review #4, by AnonomousSquib Prologue + Chapter 1

18th June 2011:
This was actually really Awesome, I loved all of it and found myself lapping it up. A Bit dissapointed that it was only one chapter though...Cant wait to read more!

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