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Review #1, by Beeezie Tears Would Come

18th September 2011:
Hey, it's Beeezie, here with your requested review! :)

All in all, the story flowed well. It got stronger as it went on - early on, some of your descriptions and metaphors were a little overdone. At one point, you say, "I waved even though you couldn't see past the darkness that had become a constant companion" - that's too much, at least for me. It makes it sound like he literally couldn't see through the darkness. At another point, you say that she heard her mother sobbing silently, which also doesn't make sense. As the story progressed, however, and as she started to talk about more concrete things, that got much better.

I liked your characterization of Ginny. It was completely plausible both in terms of what we saw of her in the books and how someone in her situation might have been feeling. It's difficult to write a story without dialogue, and it can be hard for a reader to get through. I didn't have that problem once I really started to read it, which is great. It's a different story without dialogue, but personally, I think that when you're writing something reflective like this that's fairly short, this is a good way to go about it.

All around nice job. :)

Author's Response: Hi!
Yes, thanks for pointing that out- it does seem a bit heavy on the metaphors towards the beginning- and it didn't occur to me that she would hear her mother sobbing silently . *face-palm*

Thanks! Her character is so strong and I just hoped I could do her justice. I couldn't work in any dialogue, so I'm glad it works this way.

thanks for all the help! I'll definitely make some edits and see if I can work on the metaphor thing.


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Review #2, by adluvshp Tears Would Come

10th August 2011:
hi there.

Okay I'll be honest, I don't like Ginny.
BUT this was awesome!
I think you wrote this beautifully!
I could feel every emotion so strongly!! The characterization of her was really good. The way you described her feelings was brilliant. I loved the writing style here. The flow between the scenes was perfect too. I think this was a very beautiful piece that conveys a lot. I loved the ending paragraph. Brilliant I tell you!!
The grammar was perfect too. This totally made an amazing read and I have nothing to criticize about!!
This was very well-written. I loved it. great job!!
10/10
cheers!
AD

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Author's Response: Hi AD!
Sorry it took so long to respond to this. I really appreciate you reviewing, I just haven't had the time to sit and properly respond :)

Its nice to see that you took the time to read this story!

thank you so much! I don't personally like Ginny either, but I enjoyed writing her- her character is so strong, even though I don't like how she's portrayed in the books or movies.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. thanks for reviewing!


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Review #3, by thenameismg Tears Would Come

9th July 2011:
Amazing! It's very poignant, and it was very nice seeing Ginny's perspective of Hallows

Author's Response: Hi!! thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it! and I appreciate all of your reviews -siriusly :D

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Review #4, by Timechild Tears Would Come

21st June 2011:
Interesting fic.

I like how you put Ginny's emotions to light. The detail was good and the pain showed through well.

Nice cliffhanger, It leaves me wondering if they get back together or not.

Good job all in all

Author's Response: Hi! thanks for reviewing. I'm glad the pain showed through, I had struggled to put it to words. and I was worried that no one would get through the whole fic as its kind of heavy on description and has absolutely no dialogue- so thanks ^_^

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