'it looks like your face caught on fire and someone tried to put it out with a fork'
You're really good with oneliners!
Please update soon, I think Adara is too funny.
I like the friendship between Adara/Rose/Al!
I hope it doesn't mean that both Potter boys end up in a love triangle with her, because I frankly can't stand romantic rivalries between siblings... it's just too messy ;)Author's Response: Thank you!
If there ever was a triangle, I'm not too sure there would be any rivalry between the brothers. I think there might be a bit of a misunderstanding though ;) Report Review
Its very funny and very well written. I enjoyed reading it and I hope you write more.Author's Response: thank you :) Report Review
Haha, loving this story so far. I had a great time reading all those insults, my favourite was 'Hey, there's something on your chin. Third one down." I was totally cracking up at that :)
Can't wait for more!
-EllieAuthor's Response: HI ELLIE!
I spent a whole afternoon looking up insults and trying to find ones that were suitable :P
Anyway, thank you for the review! :)
Here I am with your requested review! :)
The first thing that grabbed my attention as I read this was that Addie was telling her dad that he wasn't allowed to talk to her, and that made me laugh. Especially this line: "Can't you see, Dad? I am no longer a naive little fourth year. I am a fifth year, with high levels of maturiosity and a prefect badge to prove it."
^That was awesome^ :)
vBut not quite as awesome as thisv :)
"You have been a wonderful father, a great role model, and I have enjoyed every minute I've spent with you. Goodbye, Dad."
And the *le sigh* was epic. It made me laugh like crazy. :)
So, I'm starting to think that the rest of this review is going to be favorite quotes, even though you were probably hoping for some constructive critism. Here's to hoping I don't disappoint you. ;)
I loved the "you shut up, no you, you" between Scorp and Addie. That made me laugh as welll. :)
Anywho, the whole thing was brilliant and I absolutely adored it. :)
(LiveLaughLoveHarryPotter on the forums)
P.S. Sorry it took so long. My favorite song came on half way through reading this and I had to stop and sing and dance along with it. :PAuthor's Response: What are you talking about taking so long? :P Your fastness amazes me! ;)
Anyway, thank you for the review. I was hoping for a bit more crit, but this has made me a lot happier than crit would have :P It was a lovely review, one of the best reviews I've had :)
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Nice start to the story but I'm curious to know is Addie going to date both James and Albus in this story?Author's Response: haha something like that... I haven't really figured it out yet :P Report Review
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