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Review #1, by academica The murder of Lancelot Burke

20th June 2011:
Very interesting and humorous. Also well-written. Great work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! :)

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Review #2, by Illuminate The murder of Lancelot Burke

10th June 2011:
Hey there! Here to review your Challenge entry!

For your very first ever Murder Mystery, this is a great attempt. Your characterisation of Lucius was very good, I think you got his snootyness and character down quite well. I also like your characterization for Narcissa.

The way that they solve the murder was very interesting and straightforward. I think you could have improved it by perhaps giving the story a darker atmosphere, and perhaps concentrating less on how much Lucius dislikes having guests.

I saw a few spelling and grammar mistakes which can be easily fixed by a Beta :)

Overall, very good job, and credit for being the first to send in your entry! :D Well done!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm so happy to hear that you think my characterisation of Lucius was good, he's extremely hard to write. A darker atmosphere. That's a very good point. I've read over it again and it isn't that dark. Once I've got a moment of quiet, I'm going to sit down and go through the story again and see where I can darken the atmosphere. Thank you again for your review and for helping me with your suggestion!

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