Stories about George without Fred always seem so unbelievably sad. I don't know if there's anything worse in the world than losing your twin. I'm really glad you found a way for him to come back in this story, even if only briefly. I think George would need something like that to get him through the tough times.
And even though Fred was still in this story, I have to admit I teared up a bit. Shame on you for making me cry! ;)
The bittersweet ending fit this piece perfectly, the new chapter of his life without his twin and all that. A beautifully written story, I really enjoyed it. Report Review
I like the idea of the story, it makes sense and has a strong base for you to build off of. Leading up to the dialogue was perfect, it had emotion and a sense of the character. The only thing I think you need to work on a little bit is the dialogue, it's a little on the simple side and doesn't show the history behind them, because they are brothers. But I think that would only need a little tweeking such as Fred talking about a story from their childhood or something!
SeamusandDeanAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I kept thinking it needed something more added to it but I couldn't think what to do. This is a really great idea, I might end up changing it so I can add that in there (: Report Review
awe this was a really nice chapter lol!Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it (: Report Review
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