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Review #1, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing Staring

19th July 2015:
Hey again!

House Cup Review 2015 - Gryffindor

Yeah I came back for more of your Lily and James goodness.

So a bit different here, this is before they're together. Lily is clearly falling for him though which is why she finds him staring so intensely so bothering. James was funny, I think I believe him about the staring, some of the time. The details he noticed about her are so sweet. Right down to her freckles. He's definitely right that noone looks at her as much as he must do.

I'm glad you let Lily give him a little bit of hope at the end. It definitely made me happy to see the beginnings of them possibly getting together. James is James though he won't give up. I have faith.

Another awesome one shot!

Lauren

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Review #2, by randomwriter Staring

19th July 2015:
Gryffindor for House Cup 2015!

Hey Katie, toldya I'd be back son!

This was a bit fluffier than everything of your I've read so far, not that I'm complaining, of course! But I do prefer the other ones, I think. Maybe it's my mood. Those were a bit more lighthearted. That being said, I'm falling deeper in love with your characters. One thing I've noticed is that you tend to centre the focus of your story on just the primary characters, and I think that works extremely well for you. Your characterisation is one of your stronger suites, and so when you focus on just a couple of people, it completely shines through.

Your descriptions in this are fantastic. I could feel Lily's anger, her blushing, her feeling won over... and those lines. I would have fallen for then even if I didn't know James! But we all know how much he loves Lily, so it's okay :p But yes, the stuff he says to her are really sweet and intense. You've won both dialogue and description here!

I think this is my favourite in terms of writing. It really showcases how you can balance a multitude of writing styles really well. It's very easy to read despite how strong the emotions are, and that's something I always fail at so, erm. TEACH ME YOUR SKILLS WILL YOU?

All the gushing aside, I really enjoyed this fic. And I've changed my mind about preferring your other stories to it. It's all the same. Lovely work! :)

Author's Response: Yay! I like having you around :)

Thank you for pointing out that bit about using a few characters. It's definitely something I've noticed in my writing, but I always thought it was a bit more of a weakness than anything. I'm glad it works here, at least!

Ahh! And thank you for the compliment about my writing!

This whole review is making me smile so hard. I'm blushing a little.


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Review #3, by LastMinuteLuna Staring

5th June 2015:
Hello! Hello!

I'm LastMinuteLuna and I'm dropping by to leave you a review for the Pass It Along Challenge! I know. I know, I'm already late, but they don't call me LastMinuteLuna for nothing!

But enough about me. Let's talk about your fabulous story!

I thought this was a really sweet little story and shows us why Lily might've fallen for James. In cannon we only ever see the jerk side of him so it's nice to see a tender moment here. I could really tell how sincere he was being even if Lily couldn't!

The way James described her was so lovely. I think I might melt into a puddle myself if a man described me like that. It even seems to take a bit of edge off of her dislike of him. You did a very good job with that.

This was short, but I thought you did a good job of conveying a lot. I imagine that Lily gave into James' charm shortly after this.

Uh oh! Times up. I have to run. I've got a few more reviews to leave and I'm already late! Thanks for such a sweet story!

From,
LastMinuteLuna

Author's Response: Ah, thank you thank you!

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Review #4, by wolfgirl17 Staring

22nd March 2015:
Hello!

I'm here from the Puff review thread and let me just say that this fic is positively delightful. I love this depiction of the moment when Lily begins to see that maybe it's not such a bad thing to have James fancying her. The way you describe the entire scene is very realistic, and I especially like that you did so via 2nd person. You did it in such a way that even using 2nd person you managed to make it utterly flawless and not at all awkward, a very rare feat indeed.

Keep up the excellent work! You're writing is absolutely wonderful. I couldn't stop grinning through this whole piece!

xx-Ellie (wolfgirl)

Author's Response: Hi Ellie!

Thank you so much for stopping by! 2nd person is my absolute favorite perspective, I love to play around with it! I'm glad it came out well! Always a risk with 2nd person :)



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Review #5, by CassiePotter Staring

9th March 2015:
Hi Katie! Since I got to know you a little bit through the Hufflepuff Friendship Tag, I thought I would come review something of yours! I realized I'd never read anything you'd written, and came right over to your Author's Page to fix that.
As soon as I read that this was written in second person, I had to come read it. I love stories in second person! I find them really interesting both to read and write, and I think it works really well for this story. It helps us get into Lily's head a little more, and makes her feelings come across stronger than they would if it was in another point of view.
I thought Lily was really well-written, and her reaction to James' staring was so funny! I could picture getting all riled up because of his staring, and I loved that she was really stubborn and just wouldn't believe that he wasn't thinking about what she looks like naked. Haha.
I loved the end of this, when he starts talking about her freckles, and she kisses him on the cheek. He's been teasing her this whole time, and she finally teased him back right at the end.
This story was a lovely read, and I'm so glad I found it!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hi Cassie! Thank you so much for stopping by! Second person is one of my favorite things to write. I think it makes things so much more interesting. I don't actually remember writing this, because it was quite a while ago, but you've made me want to take another look at it!
I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :)


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Review #6, by xtinjsc Staring

9th August 2011:
Too cute! :) I think the second person point of view added a whole new twist and dimension to this fic. I enjoyed James Potter's freakish attention to detail. That bit about him noticing Lily's freckles was slightly unusual, but I did see how it could be sweet and cute. Teehee.

I liked how the banter and the little flirting was written. I though Lily and James both know how to rile each other up and that was really cute and fluffy in so many levels. Overall, this was a quick, fun and enjoyable read for me! :)

xtinjsc (Hufflepuff)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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Review #7, by dancechik15 Staring

22nd June 2011:
Aww that was cute :) I like the second person view- very different! I always pictured james/lily a lot like ron/hermiione and I think you really got that in this story!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)

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