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Review #1, by wolfgirl17 Staring

22nd March 2015:
Hello!

I'm here from the Puff review thread and let me just say that this fic is positively delightful. I love this depiction of the moment when Lily begins to see that maybe it's not such a bad thing to have James fancying her. The way you describe the entire scene is very realistic, and I especially like that you did so via 2nd person. You did it in such a way that even using 2nd person you managed to make it utterly flawless and not at all awkward, a very rare feat indeed.

Keep up the excellent work! You're writing is absolutely wonderful. I couldn't stop grinning through this whole piece!

xx-Ellie (wolfgirl)

Author's Response: Hi Ellie!

Thank you so much for stopping by! 2nd person is my absolute favorite perspective, I love to play around with it! I'm glad it came out well! Always a risk with 2nd person :)



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Review #2, by CassiePotter Staring

9th March 2015:
Hi Katie! Since I got to know you a little bit through the Hufflepuff Friendship Tag, I thought I would come review something of yours! I realized I'd never read anything you'd written, and came right over to your Author's Page to fix that.
As soon as I read that this was written in second person, I had to come read it. I love stories in second person! I find them really interesting both to read and write, and I think it works really well for this story. It helps us get into Lily's head a little more, and makes her feelings come across stronger than they would if it was in another point of view.
I thought Lily was really well-written, and her reaction to James' staring was so funny! I could picture getting all riled up because of his staring, and I loved that she was really stubborn and just wouldn't believe that he wasn't thinking about what she looks like naked. Haha.
I loved the end of this, when he starts talking about her freckles, and she kisses him on the cheek. He's been teasing her this whole time, and she finally teased him back right at the end.
This story was a lovely read, and I'm so glad I found it!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hi Cassie! Thank you so much for stopping by! Second person is one of my favorite things to write. I think it makes things so much more interesting. I don't actually remember writing this, because it was quite a while ago, but you've made me want to take another look at it!
I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :)


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Review #3, by xtinjsc Staring

9th August 2011:
Too cute! :) I think the second person point of view added a whole new twist and dimension to this fic. I enjoyed James Potter's freakish attention to detail. That bit about him noticing Lily's freckles was slightly unusual, but I did see how it could be sweet and cute. Teehee.

I liked how the banter and the little flirting was written. I though Lily and James both know how to rile each other up and that was really cute and fluffy in so many levels. Overall, this was a quick, fun and enjoyable read for me! :)

xtinjsc (Hufflepuff)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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Review #4, by dancechik15 Staring

22nd June 2011:
Aww that was cute :) I like the second person view- very different! I always pictured james/lily a lot like ron/hermiione and I think you really got that in this story!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)

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