Well, I'm here because of the podcast, and it seems you've either edited this chapter since making the podcast or edited before making the podcast and haven't updated here yet, because the words don't match exactly. :P Normally I like to follow along, but it didn't work out in this case.
So, on to actual comments about the story. This is an interesting beginning to a story. I'm a bit interested as to why Ron and Hermione are the ones to be tending McGonagall on her death bed, but then again, why not? She doesn't appear to have family, and they are convenient canon characters who don't really require explanation.
I liked the atmosphere you created with the day getting dark and the rain. It did make it seem like there really is something final going on here, an ending approaching. I thought you did a pretty good job portraying Nicholai too. He seemed the most real of all the characters, maybe because the most description was devoted to him, and he had a fair bit of dialogue too.
I wonder what choice she makes! Report Review
I love that you wrote a fic about Minerva when she was younger. And it was so well done! Report Review
Oh my goodness! There was a part of me that wanted her to go the way she should have.. I don't know why. But actually I really like the idea of her getting to have all that time with him that she should have!
This was a really great story! Report Review
Oh no!! Really clever with the blood delivery thing! Report Review
Awe okay I was so worried this was gonna be some Hogwarts meets Twilight fiasco. This is wonderful. It's nice seeing Minerva so young, I like how you've written her; a sort of know-it-all and a bit self conscious. It's nice to read Report Review
Love it!!! :) it was beautiful and it made me want to cry and laugh and jump for joy at the end... Finally!! I Report Review
I never said but I love how the picture inspired the story here. I wanted to ask did you drop a few lines there at the end. I swear I remember reading in the copy you sent me that Nicholai said he was certain he could make up for her missing Hogsmeade. I am slowly working on chapter three of mine, have you written more beyond your chapter three? Report Review
You know I still wanna know how this ends! The situation between these two is just amazing. Report Review
I've never exactly read any kind of HP fic involving vampires (which is what I'm assuming he is). And the pairing interested me. It isn't often one finds anything about McGonagall.
I'm interested to see where this is going, though I'm not sure how I feel about a vampire Minnie lol. But we'll see.
Very nice job. Some grammatical errors and the writing could have been a little more descriptive. But otherwise quite a good first chapter. Report Review
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