As a mother, this scene in my head would be my worst nightmare. Being told my son is in danger with a huge powerful wizard coming after them but I think you've done really well with this without deliberately trying to make people cry!

I love the urgency of Sirius in this, his rage and his anger all coming together into one to try and protect his best friend who is almost like his brother and his godson. I can just imagine him volunteering himself to be the secret keeper and I do truly believe that he would rather die than betray his friends within this.

Lily's motherly love is almost heartbreaking here because it goes against the grain to still be in the line of danger, for everyone to know where they are but for them just to be hidden, the idea of them holing up somewhere abroad with the fidelius charm would be much more satisfying.

James is just... so cute... saying nothing will happen to Harry. I'd love to believe him in this and it's so bittersweet because I know exactly what will happen in the end.

Well done with this though

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review!!!
I'm so glad the emotions came off as real since I was only guessing!

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MASTER!

So I said I would review you and so here I am!! Yep, reviewing you. But yeah, this story is super cute! I love your characterisations of Lily, James, Sirius and Dumbledore- they are amazing! Ah, so yeah- I totally suck at reviewing but...I LOVE YOU!

x Ely

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Amy loves you!! Aww, thank you sooo much!!

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This was soo sad. They're all unaware of what's to come. You wrote this well - though short, I thought it worked well.

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This was a great integration of your given quote - not at all what I was thinking, but man, I like this way a whole lot better. :D I love how creative you were with this, too! You've taken a missing moment from the book and made it your own, and that's not a terribly easy thing to do and still have the story retain some of JKR's magic.

Seriously well done - you should be proud of this! :3

Author's Response: Aww..Thank you so much!! I'm glad that you liked it!! I had a whole list of things that I could have written about, but this one stood out to me.

Thank you!!! =D

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Amazing :). It's actually really good, can't wait for the next chapter!!

Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked it =D =D But, this is a one-shot..there isn't going to be another chapter..

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I feel obligated to review this, even though I've already read it a bunch of times! :P "Hope is your survival" is such a good quote for this scene and I think you found a way to work it into a scene that really would have been difficult to write for anyone beautifully. Although it's short, it shows enough of what the reader needs to see to understand what is happening and really bring out some emotion. Good jub and good luck in the challenge! :)
-Annie

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