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Review #1, by UnluckyStar57 A spot of tea with the cat's younger brother...

6th July 2013:
Hi! I'm here for the B v. B review battle! :)

This is a really interesting concept! I've never read a story largely centered around Crookshanks before, and this idea intrigues me. It's very interesting that he's kind of like Peter Pettigrew--he stays with a family without revealing that he's actually a person. However, I would like to believe that Crookshanks' motives are good, not evil.

He is a very smart cat in the series, and this seems like a plausible thing. I love the way you've introduced the plot with the letter and the visit to his brother. I also like how you've given us Hermione's approximate age by mentioning Hugo.

Very good chapter! I hope you update this soon! :)

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Thanks for your review; it was quite nice.

This is an older story I wrote for a chellenge and then kinda forgot about. I have been rereading it lately though, and as soon as I am finished with my current projects I plan on adding to it and finishing it.

Thanks for reading it, because stories are useless without minds to entertain.


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Review #2, by peppersweet A spot of tea with the cat's younger brother...

4th July 2013:
Review tag!

Okay, I couldn't resist. Your summary was just so good. This looks like a most intriguing story (and I have a bit of a soft spot for Crookshanks).

Haldwin is Crookshanks' brother?! Well, that's a wee bit of a plot twist! CROOKSHANKS IS ACTUALLY A MAN?! Wow. I love this. That made me chortle. The utter seriousness of Crookshanks' - er - Hyildibart's letter is hilarious.

I love the idea of Hermione coming to terms with the fact that her cat is actually a man. The line about the scenario being like something out of the Quibbler is actually really interesting - I think JKR introduced Luna as a foil to Hermione? You know, Luna being the one with 'faith' and Hermione being the skeptic. So it'll be really interesting to see how Hermione overcomes her skepticism to help Crookshanks, I mean, Hyildibart.

I've got a couple of suggestions I hope you don't mind me making. The first is that the spacing in this chapter is a little skewiff; because you're using line breaks, you don't need to indent each paragraph. Also, the number of line breaks you use is a little irregular. Just a double return between each paragraph is plenty! I also think it might be worth reconsidering some of your word choices in that first paragraph. Your writing is sublime, and with very little mistakes, but sometimes I think you use a slightly more complex word when a simple one would work better. 'just being inside his house lent credence to her earlier assertions on the manís apparent laziness and sheer lack of taste', for example. I'm not sure 'assertions' quite works here, maybe 'assumptions'? Or, later in that same passage, 'how he had survived for this long in such unsanitary environs.' 'Environs' stuck out like a sore thumb to me - 'conditions' might be a better substitute. This is just a matter of personal taste, but I know that when I was reading these words kind of jarred and disrupted the flow a bit.

Great start, and a fantastic idea! ♥

Author's Response: Yeah I certainly plan on revising it a bit. I wrote it quite some time ago and haven't really looked back on it much sense.

The spacing was totally due to the word processing program I was using at the time and it didn't really import properly.

Thanks for the insightful review.


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Review #3, by AlexFan A spot of tea with the cat's younger brother...

4th July 2013:
Well this is certainly an interesting view on Crookshanks! I've never really thought of a story to explain Crookshanks. I mug say though, that man is great at sniffing out importers if Scabbers is anything to go by.

Hermione's reaction was perfect! It sounded exactly like something that would go through her head if she was in an actual situation like this.

I was wondering how Crookshanks had written the letter and then I read the part about his paws and I couldn't help but feel bad because it's really difficult to do things without apposable thumbs.

Author's Response: This little chapter was a lot of fun and then I never did anything else with it. I hope to be adding more to it soon, and hopefully you will read that too.

Thanks


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Review #4, by Ali4077 A spot of tea with the cat's younger brother...

22nd July 2011:
Just to let you know, I'm WolfieAli from the forums. Finally I've gotten round to reviewing this.. so sorry it took so long.

I've never read a story that explores the concept of Crookshanks being an animagus before, so this was definitely something very new for me to read. I really did like this idea however, and you couldn't help but feel for Hermione. She had no idea.. and obviously adored her cat.

I thought having the letter was a brilliant idea also. Having Crookshanks explain himself was needed. Just out of interest do you intend to have any more chapters? If you do I'm definitely reading them, I want to see how it ends.

I couldn't see any mistakes which is brilliant and I seriously love the concept of this story :) Thank you so much for entering it into my challenge and allowing me to read it.

Author's Response: Sorry its taken so lon to respond to this. I will b writing more of this story very soon I hope. Real lifehas just forced me into a break from hpff for a bit. Thanks for the kind review.

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Review #5, by ravenclaw_princess A spot of tea with the cat's younger brother...

18th June 2011:
Hehe, what a novel little story. It is a very creative idea and quite ironic considering Ron's history with Scabbers.

You write very well and fluently. There was a nice level of detail in here to fully establish the surroundings that greeted Hermione and her first assumptions on the man she was meeting. I like how these initial thoughts changed as she read the letter.

For a first chapter, it is really good at setting up a little mystery and intrigue and it caught my attention. Your grammar was also really good. Well done.

Author's Response: I hope to pick this one up again soon, and there's lots of fun to be had with it.

Thanks for the R&R

Ken


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Review #6, by nitenel A spot of tea with the cat's younger brother...

14th June 2011:
Very creative! I like it!

Author's Response: Thanks a lot, there's more to come.

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