I just started reading this story today and I absolutely love it! Isabelle is so much fun to read about and I kind of like how you don't have her jumping right at Sirius. I find Ari to be hilarious with all of his comments. My favorite was how "moaning myrtle was going to need to find a new nickname." I burst out laughing at that. You also characterize Sirius very well and it's refreshing to see him so intrigued by Isabelle, and not going and throwing himself at a ton of other girls. Cameron, drives me absolutely insane and I wish someone would knock some sense into Riley. Anyways, this is a fantastic story and I hope you can update soon! Report Review
that was an amazing chapter! It was unexpected what you were going to do with the whole Cameron and Ari thing, and it was fantastical!
And i think it was so appropriate how James's number one concern was quidditch. i love isabelle's reaction to james's comments. It's so raw and so real. can't wait for the next chapter! I'm so happy you updated. made my day! Report Review
Wow, I just read all of the chapters and I can't wait for the next one. I hope Isabelle makes up with Sirius and James. Please update soon! Report Review
My apologies for my lack of reviews, but I'm still with you on this story, please update soon!! Report Review
I am absolutely IN LOVE. The fact that you're taking the story a whole different direction that the typical "I hate Sirius, Sirius notices me, I love Sirius" is awesomeawesomeawesome. And this Isabelle/Ari thing? Its almost perfect enough that I'd be happy with just this chapter. But I'm not. So PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE keep writing! :D Report Review
I really like Ari. And I really like him as a distraction for Isabelle. He's so smooth and so worth a one-night stand hahaha. But I like your the way you don't force Sirius and Isabelle together. They're just so different, these natural almost-accidental encounters feel just right. :) Report Review
First of all, I love the atmosphere you created in the Slytherin Common Room. Everything you write is unique and not influenced by other people (besides JK Rowling, of course). Another amazing chapter- I always enjoy them. Can't wait for Chapter 9! Report Review
I'm loving this chapter! Well i'm loving the whole story really:)
I really like how Isabelle isn't perfect and that she's making mistakes with these guys, because come on, only one in a million get it right with the first guy they meet.
And I have to say i really like the Ari character and i'm hoping Belle/him will caus a bit of drama for Cameron and maybe even Sirius.
I also really like the way you've written the friendship between Belle and Riley, most school friends do grow apart and I feel like most of the stories I read on here are really fake when they describe friendships. Most friends get pissed off at each other because of how well they know the other person and then the truth tends to come out and sure it might hurt at the time but that what friendship is all about, knowing that they only say that stuff because they love you.
p.s laughed my ass off at the "Do you really think she'll get fat?" moment!
Love Ber:) Report Review
*high-pitched scream* Ah! Another brilliant chapter! I'm uber excited to see what happens between her and Ari and Sirius. Your characters have so many dimensions and your writing is beautiful. Update soon!Author's Response: This was another chapter that I enjoyed writing. It was a bit shorter than I expected, but for some reason I had a hard time deciding which way I wanted the story to go, but I think I made the right decision. Chapter 8 is in the queue, it should be up soon! Thanks for the review! Report Review
I've just found this story and loving it.
I'm going to agree with everyone else and say, the way you portray Sirius is refreshing and (I think) is more true to his character than his usual 'playboy' image he is given in other stories, cause I believe he would more into his friends and motorbike than picking up random girls! The relationship between James and Lily is a lovely change too. I always find James really annoying in other stories and the way he's always whining after Lily. I think the way you portrayed them shows the transition from annoying arrogant toerag to possible perfect couple more realistically.
I'm really starting to warm to Isabelle too, she's definitely very different to the many 'Mary-Sues' out there (which is a big compliment!).
I also really like the way you write. It seems very well thought out and detailed but not waffley, I enjoy your little quips about characters behaviours and their background infos, makes it alot easier to follow all your OC's.
Great story so far, looking forward to the next chapters :)
- siriusthinkingAuthor's Response: I, too, was irritated at the somewhat cliched manner that was becoming Sirius' character. He was always my favorite character in the books, and I have been trying to stay true to him while taking some liberties, because who knows what he would have been like before Azkaban. Ah, I'm glad that you don't find Isabelle to be Mary-Sueish, that was one of my greatest fears. She definitely isn't perfect, but I was afraid all of her complaining was going to get annoying and turn people off. I was also worried I was introducing too many OC's to follow or even care about, so I've been trying to make them complex and interesting. Thanks for reviewing!! Report Review
I think this would have to be my favorite chapter yet. Isabelle's interactions and thoughts are quite intriguing, even when she is completely hammered. I'm definately going to have to favorite this story! I cannot wait to see where things go with both Ari and Sirius. Keep up the good work!Author's Response: I had a fun time writing this one too, I knew that I needed to have a party chapter in here somewhere, but it was more difficult to write than I thought it would be. That's probably why I decided to have some sober voices take over the narration for a little while. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Sirius is definately getting in way over his head with his feelings for Isabelle. It's becomming more and more obviously by his thoughts, words, and actions that he has feelings for her, despite the fact that he seems to not want to admit it to himself. I really can't wait to see how he handles these feelings once he does realize that they are there.
The party sounds super interesting, what with most of the main characters going to be there. Certainly sounds like a promising read to me!
Lily agreeing to break the rules and go to a party with James definately seems like a rather significant moment in their relationship...I can't help but wonder if they both realize the double meaning in them going to the party "together."
Anyways, I'm off to the next chapter, and definately can't wait to read more!Author's Response: I have been having the greatest challenge writing from Sirius' point of view. So many people have a very specific image of him, whether they got it from Rowling, from stories they have read on hpff, or from the movies. It's hard to stay true to his character while also adding my own interpretation, so that is why I am not rushing his interactions with Isabelle.
The next chapter will attempt to clear some things up, but it will also help move the plot along a bit. And yes, I have been trying to give James and Lily a bit of attention, because I think their relationship is just so cute!
Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Personally, I love the length of your chapters. As an author you know where a good point is in your own story to end a chapter off at, so don't let worries of what other's think stop you there (:
And of course, another awesome chapter. I really enjoyed being in Blake's head for a few minutes, even if his thoughts were mostly shallow and self absorbed. It genuinely made me empathize with him for constantly being used by the women in his life, but really...what man ever complains about that? His heated moment with Isabelle at the end clearly shows his determination to get back at both girls for treating him the way that they do, and I'm really starting to like his character more and more.
I'm also super interested in Ari. I want to know more about him, and get deeper into his head. Just because he seems like a shallow arrogant Slytherin doesn't necessarily mean that he doesn't have something more going for him...I just can't wait to find out what it is. H'e so hot and cold, one minute he seems to want Isabelle, and the next he despises her.
Your descriptions and words are truly coming to life in this chapter and the last that I read, paintin and weaving a picture that nearly anyone could imagine in their own mind. Your writing is interestingly detailed, although not overbearingly so. I honestly don't think I have a single complaint or criticism about this story so far, other than to double check your brit speak on a few things.
Love it so far!Author's Response: I felt that I was just bombarding the readers with an onslaught of OC's throughout the story, so I wanted to give a chance for some of the more important ones to have a chance to show people their perspective. But there should be more of that coming soon, I've wanted to explore other point of views for a while, and this was a good way to start that.
Ari is going to get his chance in the next few chapters to show more of himself. I have some fun things planned in that department!
Thanks so much for the excellent review! Report Review
I don't believe they have "grades" in Europe, so Isabella claiming that her and one other boy are the only ones in "grade seven ancient runes" is a bit awkward for the setting. I believe it's year, or something like that. But anyways.
I find that often time stories written in third person lack depth, but the opposite is true in your case. Your writing gets the reader to really sympathize with Isabelle, as well as the Marauders.
I've also enjoyed the way you've written Blake and Isabelle's friendship. The fact that the two of them know exactly where their boundaries lay and what they are is incredibly well developed for them only being seventeen. Isabelle's revenge on Cameron was quite intense, and I'm definately looking forward to reading how Cameron reacted and how she'll try to get Isabelle back.
Isabelle and her cake scene revealed a lot about her true character, especially when she forced herself to finish it on account of the Marauders. I definately sense that Sirius is starting to form feelings for her, even if he himself doesn't know it yet. Report Review
Oh, drama drama drama!! I love it!
Poor Isabella. I really can't help but feeling sorry for her. Cameron is obviously jealous of her, and trying to take away everything that Isabelle has. Sometimes being the queen bitch of the school makes you enemies, and sometimes it earns you friends. And obviously most of the female friends Isabella has made really aren't friends at all. People like Cameron are poison, force feeding Riley gossip and negativity to pull her away from her best friend so that she herself has someone to be friends with. I literally wanted to strangle her when she told Isabella not to act like such a victim.
Regardless, Isabella shouldn't be doubting herself. She sees through Cameron's cherade, and knows exactly what she's like, so why should she bother giving Cameron any more of her time, mentally or physically.
Anyways, another excellent chapter! I particularly enjoyed Peeves dumping the bucket over her head, and Cameron still being jealous of Isabelle. Her and Blake at the end was also kind of a shocker, but also a nice surprise. Keep up the good work!! I really can't believe this story doesn't have more reviews. Report Review
Excellent beginning to what holds the potential to be an amazing story. Sirius/OCs are my all time favorite, and I really like the way you've portrayed him. I like the thought of him having a serious girlfriend, and sticking with her, rather than being the playboy he is usually portrayed as.
Isabelle also seems extremely complex, and I sort of love her already. She has the perfect amount of seduction, bitchiness, flaws, and positive light to make her an interesting character. Her back story about her family is also well thought out and detailed. I love hearing about where the characters come from.
I'll definately be reviewing the rest of the story over the next week or so, as I really cannot wait to read the rest! Keep up the good work (: Report Review
loving it :)
although im a little bit confused at james' dislike towards lily, i know she was a pain but i dnt think her rejecting him would be the cause for all that animosity. what happened?
well done! Report Review
ARGH! Please update SOON because you are KILLING ME! This was an amazing chapter, as they all are. I am continually stunned by your ability to drag me in and keep me there. I hate it. But I love it! I love your humor throughout and your characterization and everything! I. Need. More. Please :)
~xoxostarstruck~Author's Response: Update coming soon! Before I even posted this story online I had a pretty good store of chapters already written and just waiting to be edited, so updating isn't too difficult. I've been trying to keep things a little silly just to overshadow all the drama that continually infests their lives. Thanks so much for your kind words! They definitely help motivate me to keep writing :) Report Review
The last paragraph was absolutely brilliant! I know I keep saying this, but I can't say it enough: Your writing entrances me. I'm in your world while I'm reading, not mine, which isn't such a bad thing.Author's Response: Well it's technically Rowling's world, I'm just building off it. I try to add my own little touches here and there though, as it's needed, just to give my own spin on things. This was a short and sweet chapter that I wanted to get out as a little precursor to the one that will follow, which I hope you will thoroughly enjoy! Report Review
Eek! I loved loved loved it! You give so much insight to all of the characters, something most people can't do (me included...) I'm hooked. And it makes me kind of sad that I only have two chapters left...Author's Response: Two chapters left for now! There are plenty more on their way! I wanted to give the readers a break from Isabelle's point of view. I try not to make her too insufferable, but I wanted to show what other characters are going through as well. Everyone plays their part in this story. Report Review
AH! This chapter was hilarious! You had me laughing the entire thing! I'm addicted to this story. 100% This is probably one of the best stories I have read on this website EVER! No joke.Author's Response: Ah, you are too kind! Reviews like this really are amazing for authors to read, they always make me smile :) thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I hope you enjoy the upcoming chapters! Report Review
I really liked your different take on James' obsession with Lily. This story is so freaking amazing! You're a brilliant writer!Author's Response: I never had the impression that James was ever obsessed with Lily. I think it was one of those traits that fanfiction writers gave him that stuck (similar to the nonsense of Sirius being a lady's man when Rowling clearly said that he never was). Thanks for your positive review!! Report Review
I'm in love with this story already! You really have some talent, you're so developed as a writer and I'm extremely jealous for that. I'm surprised you don't have more reviews. But anyway, I love the plot, I love where this is heading, and I can't wait to read the next chapter!Author's Response: It took me a long time to polish this first chapter. I really wanted to establish a lot while making sure it wasn't boring, and I hope I achieved that. I promise, there will be more action in future chapters. Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
I absolutely ADORE this story! Cam is an evil witch! I can't wait to read more!Author's Response: Just remember, every character has their own side of the story--and Isabelle is not the most reliable of narrators. But I'm hoping to get some of Cameron's perspective in soon, it will be interesting to explore her subconscious. But don't get me wrong, she is pretty horrible. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Really good, update soon! :)Author's Response: Thank you! I most definitely will! Report Review
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