This is so beautiful! I've never ever read a fic about Ariana, but her character always intrigued me so so much. I love the way you really take a look into how Albus effected her so much. Because we knew the bare bones of the story, but this takes it to another level, it's so sad. But so beautiful! Report Review
Wow. I LOVE your Ariana. I mean, really. You capture this character so well, showing how someone can seem so damaged and yet underneath makes complete sense. The explanations for her actions work perfectly, and they make me feel so very sorry for her.
I especially love the last few paragraphs, where she finally gets the love and attention she wants when it's all too late. That's gorgeous, and wrapped the whole story up nicely, so that it felt like it had come to an end for more than simply because the protagonist died. It felt like she was finished.
CapellaBlack, GryffindorAuthor's Response: Oh, thank you so much. That means a lot, because I was really worried about getting Ariana "right". I'm glad you thought I did!
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Wow. What an interesting piece. You've really got into her head here, with the comment that they don't think about her as Ariana any more, as a person, because she doesn't feel like a person. I also liked how she was disassociating herself from her family because they were doing the same to her - she knew about the boy her brother loved, but didn't bother to learn his name because it was irrelevant to her. The memories and regrets were all too human, too, and th efeeling of falling, falling ... how tragic. Because we know what it's referring to, but it was so sad that her life was cut short like that, and then we know, but she doesn't, the impact that event has on the others in her family. Again, this was really realy well done. Fantastic job. :D
melian (gryffindor)Author's Response: Thank you so much. :) I'm glad you thought so - I worked hard on this, and it's nice to hear that it wasn't all for nothing. xD I appreciate that so much! :) Report Review
Ariana… she is really underrated as character. To me, though, she’s an intriguing one. I always wanted to know more about her, but, in the book, they wouldn’t say more than the fact she was sick – she was mentally sick. It’s good to hear this from her POV. I really loved the last part – almost made me cry.Author's Response: I agree completely about Ariana! I'm glad that you liked this, and I'm sorry for almost making you cry (although that's the mark of a good story, so I'm not that sorry. ;)). Thank you so much! Report Review
Although short.. this is definitely powerful. :D
Just to let you know I'm WolfieAli from the forums and I'm sorry I didn't get to this sooner, so thank you for entering my challenge. :)
I've not read much Ariana before, well to be blunt I read my first Ariana fic earlier, but I've enjoyed this one, it was from a different angle. I liked the mention of how they don't call her by name anymore, it shows how they've detached themselves from her.
Your last line was definitely very powerful. I go on about last lines a lot but if they're good, then they sort of tie up the entire piece.. if that makes any sense. It's the last thing you read and for it to end well, just makes everything much better. This last line says it all really, it was too late for Ariana.
I enjoyed reading it very much, thank you for entering my challenge and sorry this review is so short. I'm not the best at reviews. :DAuthor's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I'm so glad you thought so, it means a lot. Ă˘Â™ÂĄ And your review was wonderful, thank you! :D Report Review
You did an EXCELLENT job writing Arianna. Strange as it may seem, she's one of my favorite characters in the entire series because she is a great example of one of the greates themes of the story: How something very small can make the biggest of impacts. I like that this is a little on the short side- you didn't muddle it up with useless words, and you were able to describe the most complex parts of Arianna's soul in a way that was very simple to understand and relate to. Great job!Author's Response: Thank you! That means so, so much to me, I'm glad you thought that. I like her character, too, and I'm glad that came across. Report Review
Wow! That was a really great piece! I haven't read anything in Ariana's perspective (that I can remember at least lol) but I think I'm going to have to look at some more after this! I loved how you made it seem as if she wasn't just crazy, more like she was trapped inside herself. It made her seem more like a real person to me. I also really liked how you portrayed Albus. I have to admit that I didn't like him after I read the 7th book. He played with a lot of lives, and it seems to me that his actions caused a lot of deaths...Ariana's included. You showed that side of him, something most authors don't do. Once again, really great work! I'm really glad I read it :)Author's Response: Thank you! Ah, I'm sitting here and kind of flailing. I'm so glad you think so, it means a lot. (: Report Review
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