Hello there, I am here to judge your entry!!
Please be aware that it is a very close contest as all seven entries that I had where brilliantly constructed.
“Really?” Potter grinned. “See, I told you, Evans, you couldn’t resist me.”
- This is so James Potter. I generally don't read Mauraders, but in his attempts to get Lily, I could so see him doing something like this. The way people also portray James is that he doesn't care, but you managed to place a lil sensitive side into him as well.
This was an amazing piece to read. I knew that the line was going to be hard to create a piece around, but you did it so wonderfully. You showed me what Lily and Severus where feeling. How Severus was a little sad that Lily thought nothing of it and that Lily herself was so confused by how she honestly felt.
I like also how you showed us how they meet, I thought that was really cute.
All in all, a very well written piece of writing.
I am glad you took the oppurtunity to take part in my challenge. I hope too see you again in further ones I hold. Please look out for a blog soon confimring the winners of the 10 things I hate Challenge.
[i]~Karni. x [/i]Author's Response: Hello!
Ha ha, I figured. It generally seems a close battle between entries most times.
Ha ha, thanks! :) I generally have a hard time trying not to overdo or underdo James. He's just hard for me because I really don't understand his motivation in most circumstances, however, I'm glad that you liked the way that I characterized him. It's a relief to know that I can do well on characters that I don't even particularly like. ^_^
Thank you again! Honestly, Severus is my favorite to write. He's probably one of the richest and most well rounded characters that Rowling wrote. He's just so real. I thought that Severus would be despondent about it because well as we all know he had a possessive/obsessive love for Lily all his life.
As for Lily, I tried to make her an ordinary teenage girl. She doesn't know how she should/is supposed to feel. It was just something she did on a whim and now she thinks that it might change everything, and she doesn't really know how to feel about that.
I felt that was the route to go - I'm so sick of reading 'O' receiving, all knowing, shrieking banshee, James hating Lily. Because when it comes down to it, of the two, the books make it seem as if James was more powerful than Lily - at least that was my perception of it when Rowling was said and done with the story.
Thank you very much again! I really appreciate your detailed review and your input!
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I really love this story!!! I have never read any Lily/Snape story before, but this one is just so cute!
Btw, LOVE your banner!! (Ben Barnes... Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks for the input. I don't generally write Severus/Lily as I'm not really a fan of this shipping, but I'm glad that you like it. Thanks, I thought it was rather fitting for this story.
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This was really good! The pace was absolutely perfect, in my opinion. It wasn't too rushed, yet it never felt dragging. You're descriptions of Lily's feeling made it easy to relate to her and to really feel what she was talking about, as if I were watching it happen right in front of me. I would have liked to maybe see a resolution with Severus, but now that I think about it, the ending made it seem all so tranquil, and I don't think adding more would do much for an already great one-shot. Well done!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm quite glad that you liked this one-shot. Generally, it's hard for me to get into Lily's head so I'm really rather glad that you like my rendition of her. Again, thanks so much! Report Review
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