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Review #1, by Pretense Of Perfection Choices

9th July 2014:
Hello there!!

I love a good Sirius/OC, and this was no exception t that. I really like how you portrayed Dorcas, and even though I think Sirius is a jerk, i think you did his character justice, because I can see him lying and perhaps even cheating, especially given all he's been through (not that it's an excuse). I was really curious about the title, and it completely made sense after I read this. I like how you tied it in with the story, almost like a pretty little present. The comparison between their relationship and a shiny apple gone rotten was absolutely brilliant, if I do say so myself. You did an excellent job portraying the uncertainty and confusion being in a toxic relationship, and I think your readers will be able to relate to the story and your MC easily. I do think Dorcas sort of repeated herself a bit toward the end, but everything else was literally perfect. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors, and I really love the idea for the plot. I want to know what happens to them so badly, I might just have to come back and read the sequel.

Good job and keep up the aweomse writing!!

---house cup 2014 review---
pretense of perfection, gryffindor

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Review #2, by Debra20 Choices

6th August 2011:
No, no nooo! Why didn't you continue? You really left me hanging for the answer she would give.

I can only say, YAY to a Sirius/Dorcas story. For some time now I have been obsessed with the first Order of the Phoenix members and the story of their lives. It really intrigued me that you paired the both of them. Until a few days ago I never thought about that possibility but now that I read your story and other comments on the forums I can see why it could work.

I don't know why, but I never imagined Sirius being the type to cheat on his girlfriend. Or if he would indeed cheat, his doing it would result from maybe fear of breaking up with the girl, or just following an impulse, but never actually meaning to hurt the girl. I cant see him being that heartless. However, there is a big but here! We only know her version of the story. She can possibly be wrong, as everyone's perception on a certain event is always different. This little one shot really made me wonder what happened between them for Dorcas to think that all he ever said were lies.

Thanks for writing such a great story for an unusual but beautiful pairing that I will almost certainly ship very soon :D


House Cup 2011, End of an Era Review Extravaganza
Forum name: Debra20
House: Gryffindor

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