Finally, at last they seem to have found the cure for Bill. I say seems, because I believe they left the rest of the potion for the next full moon. but I believe they did. The removal of the curse was as dramatic as a dying horcrux, possibly the two have connections, as the creation, or the magic involved. Having Fleur letting the angry Veela loose was just what was needed. I'm not sure just why the trimming of the dangerous plants was included, but I don't discount anything you put in. There is more to the mystery. I'll stay tuned.
FoMAuthor's Response: Hi, and thanks for commenting again. After the problem of Bill's curse going on for so long and being such dark magic, I thought the scene with him drinking the potion deserved some drama. There's a little bit of the story left to tell, but not too much - only 3 more chapters left to go - with the climax of the plot in the next 2, so I hope you'll enjoy the little bit of mystery and surprise that's still to come. Thanks, as always, for reading and reviewing. I always enjoy your comments.
Brilliant!!! I thank you for the House Elf Cemetery. Hogwarts is the one place that treats the House Elves as they want to be treated. Harry requesting that the Grimmauld Elves get a proper burial. Kreacher was very touched, I could tell. It was sad that right after, Harry had to ask Kreacher to take him to the place he lost Regulus. How tragic, but maybe that part of Regulus will help Bill. It might even bring the Blacks out of the Dark. I am very excited. Now I understand why the Portrait of Salazar hasn't spoken or moved. Though I still have hope that someday the portraits of the Founders will be found. I hope you next post is soon.
FoMAuthor's Response: Hi, thanks for another lovely review. I wasn't sure how this chapter with Regulus' blood would go over with readers. I thought some might find it too predictable, whereas others might not think of the blood sacrifice in the cave and be surprised. In any case, I decided to use it because it made good such good sense to me, and I enjoyed being able to use that little detail from canon in my own story. Thanks for your comments about the elf cemetery. I'm glad you enjoyed that part. I enjoyed exploring how Kreacher would react when Harry arranged a decent burial.
Thanks again for you comments. I hope you'll enjoy the last few chapters yet to come. Report Review
My Word! Now this was a twist I didn't see coming, even in my Crystal Ball! It was really fascinating. It also made so much sense. It was sad that they knew that Flamel didn't have much longer to live himself. How ironic that one of the first magical projects the three worked on was centered around this particular Wizard? How honorable was it that he volunteered to remove the memory of Albus being gone? I guess it would have been too easy for the Flamel of the 14th Century to produce a fully translated missive. They will still have to work for it. I have to wonder just who they will trust with the truth of this adventure? Who will believe it? On with the next!
PS I wonder who Minerva will pass this wondrous Time Turner to? Could it be Hermione? But that's far into the future. Imagine a Time Turner that will take you centuries back? I wonder if Albus was ever tempted to go back to the start of Hogwarts?Author's Response: Hi, thanks. I'm really tickled by your review because I did try to keep the surprises coming all the way to the end of the story. Actually this time around, the reason I had Flamel not give a full translation is because things need to happen in a certain order to keep the story ending a surprise, so I couldn't let the characters have a full translation yet. Yes, I thought Flamel would be honorable enough to erase the knowledge of Dumbledore's death from his mind and Pernelle's. After all, he agreed to let the philosopher's stone be destroyed in Book 1, even though it would mean the death of himself and his wife, so to my mind, he's a wizard of high integrity.
The existence of a Time Turner is a really problematic thing in a story, because it means that any plot you create can potentially be undone by a character going back in time, so I think they're best used judiciously and with caution. I suspect that might be the reason JKR decided to destroy the time turners at the Battle of the Ministry in Book 5, so that readers couldn't argue that the ending of her story could be undone by time travel. In response to one of your questions, with a Time Turner in his hands, I would not put anything past Albus. I think he would have done as much as he could with it.
I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter and hope you'll enjoy the next. Thanks for another lovely and fun review.
Another excellent chapter, that was packed with info. It might take a while to figure it all out. Here's my chapter question, why, since they are searching through Professor Snapes belongings in the heads office, are they not getting advice from Albus's portrait? Not forgetting all the other former heads, who love "helping" with intellectual pursuits? That would be a spectacular addition.
Till the next,
PS Refresh my memory, have you included a portrait of Severus in this story? I read so many and right now it's pretty much divided equally. If you do, he would be the best reference.Author's Response: Hi, I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter, and thanks for posting a response.
Harry can't go to Dumbledore's portrait for answers because Albus left his portrait in Chapter 26, and hasn't returned yet. I decided early on in the story that having Albus's portrait around to go to for answers would make things much too easy on Harry, so that's why I had Albus leave. He'll eventually be back and you'll find out where he's been, but I wanted Harry to have to figure things out mostly on his own, just because I think it makes a better story that way. And no, I haven't put a portrait of Snape in the story for the very same reason. Snape would be too much help as well, but his portrait will show up later. The rest of the Headmaster portraits really wouldn't be able to tell Harry what he needs, but I do agree with you that it would be a great thing if they had information to give. Unfortunately they don't. But Harry WILL get some help in the next chapter that will help him figure out the answers, so he won't be floundering for long.
Thanks again for reading and sharing your thoughts. I always enjoy them. Report Review
Oh my! I couldn't, and still can't understand how the portrait of Salazar could produce an AK? So is there someone in the earthly world that wanted Harry dead? actually, when he "woke" up in Hogwarts I fully expected to have SS standing there. I still will not be surprised to see him appear. I suppose that he or Dumbledore just might have the key to help Bill? I do hope so. Please, please, please have the next chapter posted soon. This is a chapter of rare opportunity. This was truly a nail biter.
FoMAuthor's Response: I loved reading your comments as always. It's always fun to get an insight into what a reader is thinking, so thanks again for sharing. I'm glad you enjoyed the little bit of suspense this chapter offered. There aren't many chapters to go to solve the mystery, and I hope you'll enjoy the solution as it unfolds.
I thought that was a unique Christmas celebration. Harry handled the chat with Kreacher really well. He might have asked Kreacher what he thought could be done with the portrait? I think by asking his opinion it makes Kreacher realise how much Harry respects and cares for him. You really could see how much it meant to Kreacher when Harry asked about burial for the elves. That just might lead to a much happier Kreacher. Could be the next time Harry visits #12 it will be super clean. I love the idea that Hogwarts has a special cemetery for their House Elves. Did I miss something? What was it that Arthur gave Harry from Kingsley? I can't wait for the next chapter!
FoMAuthor's Response: Hi, thanks for sharing your thoughts on another chapter. I always enjoy reading them.
The item Arthur gave Harry from Kingsley was a container of special floo powder for Grimmauld Place that was self-replenishing. I'm sorry if I made that too vague in the story. I thought readers would have no problem realizing what the item was even if I didn't mention it by name, so thanks for letting me know you didn't automatically pick up on it.
I wanted Harry to be considerate of Kreacher's feelings about moving Mrs. Black, but I didn't want to put Kreacher in control of deciding what to do with the painting, the reason being that I don't think the house elf code would have allowed Kreacher to be the decision maker. I think Kreacher would have been bound by the code to say that it was for an elf's Master to decide. Same thing with the Hogwarts elf cemetary. The only reason Kreacher gave Harry information about it was because Harry had no clue where to bury the elf heads.
When I came to this part of the story where Harry would make a major change to Grimmauld Place by moving Mrs. Black, and perhaps other changes down the road as well, I decided it would be good for Harry to do something really profound to earn Kreacher's loyalty, because in the books Harry had only done a few minor things, like talking to Kreacher a more nicely and letting Kreacher keep the fake locket that belonged to Regulus. I didn't think that alone would guarantee Kreacher always staying loyal to Harry, especially if Harry started doing things with the house that Kreacher didn't like. So I hit on the idea for graves for the elves, which seemed like a profound enough gesture that would earn Kreacher's loyalty. I imagine many elves were treated just as badly by uncaring Masters in death as they were in life, possibly ending up in unmarked graves or mass graves, or with their heads on the wall as the Blacks demonstrated. A marked grave might seem like real honor to an elf, so I went with it. It will give Kreacher an ongoing incentive to be genuinely loyal to Harry, so he can end up with a marked grave for himself and not have that honor taken away if he disobeys. I doubt Kreacher would ever be as voluntarily self-sacrificing as Dobby, but I think he can be loyal in his own cranky way as much to Harry as he was to the Blacks if he's treated well. Report Review
I enjoyed tension between Harry and Draco very much. I love their uneasy friendship.Author's Response: Hi again, and thanks for leaving another note. Well, I don't think I would call it a friendship between Harry and Draco, even though I did show Harry trying to give Draco the opportunity of agreeing to some sort of truce between them.
When I wrote this scene I was thinking of the way they were portrayed in the epilogue of the books. When Harry, Ron, and Hermione notice Draco and his family on the train platform in the books, they don't greet him or approach him and his family. But neither were there any nasty looks exchanged. This portrayal led me to believe that there was just a mutual 'live and let live' avoidance that developed between these characters over the years. I think Ron also tells Rose to make sure she beats Scorpius on every exam, which seems to suggest that the animosity hasn't changed between these characters over the years.
So in keeping with how the characters were shown in the epilogue, I was very careful not to whitewash Draco in my own story and to keep his demeanor toward Harry quite unpleasant. Even though Harry offers truce, and Draco might inwardly even consider it, he can't actually accept it. In the time-frame of this chapter, I imagine Draco to still be fearful of himself and his family getting arrested and sent to Azkaban. He would probably also be fearful of Death Eater backlash for fleeing with his family from the battle, and wouldn't want to risk being seen in the wrong company. I portrayed him as basically still trapped in his Malfoy upbringing, and not yet having the strength of character to stand up to what his conscience may be hinting is right.
The scene of George's comforting Angelina who missed Fred was a very touching sight.
I enjoyed the scene of jest between Harry /Ginny and Ron/ Hermione.Author's Response: Hi, thanks for your comments. This was a fun chapter to write. I'm glad you enjoyed those scenes. I was hoping that moment between Angelina and George would come across well. I didn't want it to feel romantic yet, but I did want to point out the dilemma they would face later on down the road when they did start dating. I also wanted to point out that while the twins were a lot a like, they were also individuals and shouldn't just be thought of as interchangeable in the relationships they had with others.
Anyway, I'm always happy when I find ways to include George in this story. I've always been a fan of the twins, but find them a challenge to write. Thanks again for your comments. I'm glad you've enjoyed the story enough to keep reading this far. Report Review
It seems that you are throwing out hints of the solution. If only it can be grasped. I do hope Harry can turn Grimmauld Place into a home. At least one to be used when he's in the city They have to find a way to rid the house of Mrs. Blacks portrait. A country home makes sense for a permanent home. I hope you have the next one ready for queue.
FoMAuthor's Response: Hi again. Yes, bits of information are beginning to filter in, but again, Harry and the others will have to discover whether or not it's useful. I also wanted to put in enough uncertain information so that the story would never be predictable for the reader either.
I think as the time got closer to where Harry would actually need to move into Grimmauld Place, he would start to have really mixed feelings about it, which I tried to show in this chapter. I think it's definitely a two-edged sword that he'll have to grapple with, not only for himself, but also Teddy. And in later years, Ginny's feelings will have to be taken into account as well, about to where to settle down and raise a family. So I'm going to explore a little more of this in the next chapter, along with the matter of Kreacher who would certainly also factor into the picture. And Mrs. Black's portrait, yes indeed!
As for myself, I do agree with you - I never pictured Harry and Ginny raising a family in Grimmauld Place. I always thought they would either end up in a home close to the Burrow, or else in a very nice city home of their own. The two of them would certainly have the income to afford a really nice place. But I don't think Harry would ever be completely disconnected from Grimmauld Place either. I think he would continue to use it in some capacity, if only for the Order or the aurors to use, and to preserve it for Teddy. So it'll be Christmas at Grimmauld Place as the next chapter, which will be up in the usual time frame because I still need time to edit the chapters that come after that. There are only about 8-10 chapters left to go depending on how I break them for length! So after the next Christmas chapter we'll getting into the home stretch.
Thanks again for another review, which gives me the chance to also share a few of my thoughts with you.
I must commend you again on your imagination when it comes to Magic. a Martyr Dragon? A sufficating bubble? Awesome! I don't think they were listening when Sir Cadogen said the same thing Luna did. So I guessing it will be real. Kingsley could use one I think. Learning the talking Patronus charm and unusual defenses in DADA was great! I must go on as I can't wait to find out what happens next.
FoMAuthor's Response: Hi, I'm glad you enjoyed the magic I introduced. Whenever I put a new idea of my own into the story, I'm always careful to make it a good fit with the HP world. I hoped the suffocating bubble scene would shed a little more uncertainty on Ogilvie, both for Harry and the reader.
As for the unusual defenses in the DADA class, I got that idea from the duel between Dumbledore and Voldemort in Book 5, who weren't just using ordinary dueling spells on each other. They were using highly advanced magic, so it seemed that dueling in this fashion should at least be introduced in the last year's DADA class. It would certainly seem like an oversight in education to leave it out.
Both Luna and Cadogan are characters that are sometimes not taken too seriously by others, which is why I used them. Harry will have to discover whether the information they gave is useful or not.
Thanks again for sharing your comments. I always enjoy reading them. Report Review
I love your story! please continue!Author's Response: Hi, glad to hear you enjoy it and thanks for letting me know. Chapter 30 is in the queue and should be up soon. Report Review
Wow what a terrific first chapter. I've been meaning to read your story for a while and now that I have read the first chapter, my only complaint was that I should have started sooner!
Just from this first chapter I can tell that this story is going to abide by the canon - something I love and can appreciate. You have the characterization of the characters down to a tee. I can definitely learn a thing or two from you about maintaining Rowling's characterization.
You write dialogue well; it flows from line to line to the point where I can fully imagine these characters having the conversation. This may seem a mute point, but it's something easier said than done. Your dialogue makes the reader relax when reading the story - I personally am not distracted by the odd syntax or wording of your sentences. I don't mean to bore you in this review, but you do it tremendously well, so thank you! As an English student, I can whole-heartedly appreciate it!
As far as the story: great job at starting with some action (that was written beautifully, by the way... I could imagine every line as if I was watching a movie) - you got me hooked right away. I love the little tidbits of creativity, like the Death Eater prisoners betting on Peeves from their cell. Subtly hillarious! You showed the characters' emotions regarding the deaths of their friends in a very believable way that seemed realistic and most importantly, not fake. Simply showing the different things at Madam Pomfrey's disposal was cool because it was something that is not given alot of attention to in the novels other than Skele-gro... it adds real depth to your world. Finally, you've got the quirky, comical side of the wizarding world down pat making your own creative additions to the wizarding world fit in seamlessly. Bravo!
I can't wait to read the next chapters in your story - you most definitely have a reader in me! I've (at this point) got 28 chapters more ahead of me so I can't wait plunge in to the story over the break! Excellent start to the story! I'm very curious where the story goes from here!Author's Response: Hi and welcome to the story! I'm so glad you started reading and enjoyed the first chapter so much. And thanks for leaving such a lovely review. This is my first fan-fiction, and also the first novel-length piece of writing I have ever done, so to get comments as nice as yours is really encouraging. The writing definitely still has some rough edges that could use smoothing out, and there are places I notice that the story lags too much especially in the early chapters, but such is the learning process. I'm grateful that readers are able to enjoy the story despite the flaws.
I'm glad you enjoyed the action scene in this chapter. I thought it would be a good way to get the story rolling. Action scenes are something I seldom see in most HP fan-fiction since a lot of writers seem to focus on writing romance, so I made a point of deliberately including some action in my own story, both in this chapter and others. I;'m glad you thought it was well written and worked.
One thing I've really been striving for is to get the feel of the magical world and the characters 'right', so I was delighted by your comments that you thought I had the characters and dialogue believable and right. One character I know I didn't get just right is Shacklebolt. I never really got a good sense of what he was like or how he talked from the books, so the dialogue I gave him in this story is pretty generic, so I apologize in advance for that.
Another thing I tried to do was to make the story fell well-rounded. There are plenty of scenes I put in that have nothing to do with the main plot, but that I wrote just to add richness, humor, or detail to story that I hope readers will enjoy the same way I do. I really appreciated you mentioning the things you've noticed already and letting me know you like them being included.
With regard to canon, let me just say that while I've tried to keep the story close to canon, it's not strictly canon. There were times when I deviated a little on purpose, and sometimes a little by accident because it's been a long time since I've read some of the books. My aim was simply to write a good story rather than trying to make every little thing agree with canon. But I hope it's close enough for even canon lovers to enjoy.
Well, all of the nice things you said in your review really made my day! It was certainly a pleasure to hear from you, and I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the story as much as you've enjoyed the first chapter. I do update regularly, and usually post a new chapter about every 3 weeks.
Fascinating! The discussion with Professor McGonagall is similar to when Harry had suspicions of Dracos actions. He was right, then as I remember. Perhaps what he is sensing from Professor Olgivie is the curse that turned him looking much older than he is.
The question is why was he cursed, and by who? I thank you for the extended trip to Hogsmeade, visiting never before mentioned shops, but were very logically in place, I do love some of the Magic you have added. The devouring drawer, brilliant! The money socks, not so much. The singing socks have potential, as long as they can be turned off. I'm guessing it will be the next chapter that they brew the potion. I am very anxious. Write quick!
Well, I'm glad to hear this chapter went over well with you. Yes, Harry is voicing his suspicions much like he did with Draco in the original books. I hope the scene I wrote for this chapter will make readers question for themselves what might be going on, as they examine suspicions of their own, and compare them to Harry's.
I thought a Hogsmeade trip would be a pretty dull repetition of the books if I didn't put in some new things to add a bit of interest. The sock theme ran through the original books, so I decided to continue it in this story. Some of it was just put in to add a bit of silly humor. And just like in real life, some magical products are sure to be a hit while others are mediocre and some are just bad - I agree with your evaluation of them, and so did Ron!
I won't say what's coming in the next chapter, but I hope you'll enjoy what it does contain. Thanks for reading and for steadily sharing your thoughts about the story. It's always a pleasure to hear from you. Report Review
just finished reading the story i dont comment chapter by chapter but i think your doing really well! interesting story line just wondering when the next chapter will be upAuthor's Response:
Hi, I'm so glad you found the story and were interested enough to continue reading this far. It's my first fanfic and my first attempt at a novel.
Oh, I know what you mean about not reviewing every chapter of a story. More often than not, I do the same thing myself, so it's fine with me when readers of my own story don't leave comments. Some people love doing it while others don't, and that's fine. After all, just reading stories can take up a lot of time, and then feeling like you owe an author a courtesy review can get to be like a tedious chore if you're simply not inclined. Or you might worry that an author might be offended if they don't hear from you all the time after you've left an encouraging comment or two. No worries. I appreciate a quiet reader as much as those who like to comment a lot.
Anyway, thanks for letting me know you've enjoyed the story so far, and I hope you'll drop back in to keep reading. I update regularly, about every 3 weeks, and the next chapter will probably be up within a week or so.
So far, so good as far as I'm concerned! You've more than peaked my interest with the events at the museum. My only problem with the story is that it's not finished, I'm just sitting on the edge of my seat waiting for the next instalment! :)Author's Response: Hi, thanks for reading and leaving a note. I'm glad you found the chapter interesting, and I hope you'll stick around for the next. A new chapter usually goes up about every 3 weeks.
Yeah, the problem with posting a novel-length WIP is that readers read much faster than writers write - and painstakingly edit to a final draft!! Thanks again for your comments. It was nice to hear from you. Report Review
Oh I want to go to that Museum! How could they pass a portrait of Slytherin and not try to speak to him? JKR never mentioned portaits of the Founders, but there must be some. And why can't they speak to Dumbledore? They could ask Minerva if they could talk to his portrait. As far as the mystery blood ingredient? I have an idea as to who has that blood. I will wait to see if I'm right. Really good chapter! I still want to go to the Museum!
PS I still think Ogilvie is a bit shady.Author's Response: Hi, and thanks again for sharing your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter.
For the purpose of story-telling, I needed Harry not to know too much too early, or to have too much help. That's why I had Dumbledore leave his portrait in the last chapter - he's gone, so Harry can't just go to him for answers right now. Harry will have to figure things out largely on his own, because it makes a better story that way.
It's also a better story for Harry and the reader not to know too much about Slytherin's portrait right away, so that's why I had them not disturb it. After killing Voldemort, I think Harry would be pretty intimidated to disturb the portrait anyway. I imagine he'd want to let sleeping dogs lie when it came to that bloodline, for fear it might open something in Pandora's Box again. Anyway, Harry will be back to the museum for a few more surprises.
Oh, I'll be very interested to hear whether your suspicions about the mystery blood are right when we explore that part. But either way, the story will take some unpredictable turns.
And thanks for mentioning your opinion about Ogilvie. I was hoping my portrayal of him and his connection with the museum would give readers cause to wonder what side of the fence he's actually on.
Well, I hope you enjoy the upcoming chapters , and thanks again for a very nice note! Report Review
What an excellent chapter. You gave us (your readers) a lot to think about. The Museum is a stroke of genius. Though I have read about all sorts of Magical Museums,(in other fictions,) this is the first to be totally about the Dark. I am surprised that Bill didn't mention it. The Library is just the place to find a cure, if there is one. I found myself intrigued as to Dark objects knowing where they belong, and emitting some of the Darkness when moved. I do hope they find something soon. I also think at the very earliest he can manage, Harry needs to apologise to Professor Slughorn. He should remind him that he wasn't talking about the secret they share, but there are things in everyones life that they want to keep hidden. I do look forward to the next. Please post soon.
FoMAuthor's Response: Hi, thanks for sharing your thoughts again. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter.
Actually the Museum isn't completely dark, but dark items certainly make up a full 50% of the inventory, if not a bit more. I took into account that even Dark Wizards use lots of ordinary magical items, so I think even a Museum run by Durmstrangs would include those as well. But I did want to focus on the creepy side. I also got to thinking that just like wands, some magic items might have preferences in how they're used and might resent being moved. I remembered Dumbledore saying in the Half-Blood Prince that magic, particularly Dark magic, leaves traces, and I always thought that made sense, magic being a sort of energy.
Harry did offer a quick word of apology right away when he realized he'd made Slughorn uneasy. In real life though, you're absolutely right - a more formal apology to Slughorn would certainly be appropriate to make sure there were no lasting ruffled feathers. For the purpose of the story though, that little bit of disturbance readers may feel with that scene is probably a good thing.
Thanks for sharing your comments. It's always a pleasure to hear from you.
Bristle Rash? Where do you come up with your Magical names. It does sound perfect, as well as most uncomfortable. Maybe one day someone will come up with a Preventative to belay an outbreak.
On the the Bill front, I do wish you would have described the Patronus that Bill produced. It could have held a clue. It does seem like good news that he didn't transform. But I have a feeling the worry hasn't ended. On the Quidditch team things are looking up. What a Brilliant idea for the Alumni team to train with the present team. Cool!!!
FoMAuthor's Response: Hi, nice to hear from you again. Sometimes when I'm not really in the mood to write, I'll make lists of things such as names for magical items, diseases, plants, or creatures, hoping it will jog my creativity at a future date. Tatter Cloth and Bristle Rash came to me during one of those list-making times. I liked the name Bristle Rash enough to write a little story about it, thinking it might make a nice one-shot, but it turned out so well, that I decided to use it as a story chapter.
I debated whether or not I should decide on an animal for Bill's patronus. He's such a major character that I hated to fiddle with canon, so I ended up leaving it an unknown as that's what we're left with in the original books. Maybe JK Rowling will tell us one day what Bill's patronus is. If she does, I'll write it in. For my own story, the form of his patronus is not a critical detail. I KNOW you had the lovely idea that a patronus might be key to finding a cure for Bill! But I'd already finished a rough draft of all future chapters before you mentioned it, so I'm afraid the plot line has already been decided. I will say that you're quite right that the worry about him hasn't ended.
I'm glad you liked the quidditch idea. My favorite quidditch team were the years when Fred and George played beaters, so I was only too happy to bring those players back into the story somehow.
Thanks, as always, for you comments. I do enjoy reading your reviews- even on stories that aren't my own! Your opinions are always very well put and good food for thought. Thanks for sharing some of them here!
FINISH THE STORY PLEASE! ITS SOO GOOD! U WRITE JUST LIKE JK!Author's Response: Hi, I'm glad you're enjoying the story this much, and thanks for the lovely compliment. A new chapter is posted about every 3 weeks, so probably less than 2 weeks before the next chapter is up. I hope you continue to enjoy it!
This story is really, really good it's as if J K Rowling has writen it herself. I'm desperately hoping you will finish it...dying to know what happens next. I only rated it 9 because there are some mistakes as with any story (but i rate harshly anyway). I will be sending a link to all my friends so that they can read it too. please finish writing it soon.Author's Response: Hi, and thank you ever so much for such terrific comments. I'm absolutely flattered that you enjoy the story well enough to compare it to Rowling's own writing. What a tremendous compliment - I'm humbled. A new chapter is usually posted about every 3 weeks, which I hope you will continue to enjoy. I also give you another big thanks for wanting to recommend the story to your friends. If they decide to give it read, I hope they enjoy it as well. Thanks again! It was nice to hear from you.
What an excellent, yet normal start to the term. I know it's early, but I do get a positive feelings for Ogilvie. He is different from any Professor we have encountered. But his practical approach to DADA is refreshing and though provoking. Something tells me it's his philosophy that caused Mad-Eye to be ever vigilant.
Making Ron co-captain was just Harry being Harry. If and when they win the Cup, Harry should and will let Ron accept it.
For the last part, anything with Dementors is the height of creepy. A thought hit me, what if using a Patronus will help cure Bill? It is intriguing.
FoMAuthor's Response: Hi, thanks as always for your comments. I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. I must say that trying to create an OC DADA teacher who I thought would really fit in the Harry Potter world was a daunting task, so I really appreciate your comments, and I hope Ogilvie will continue to add interest to the story as the plot thickens. He certainly does share Moody's attitude about vigilance, but I'd better hold off on commenting any further lest I give anything away. I really enjoyed hearing your thoughts about him though.
As for Bill's curse, the Foursome are going to be quite occupied with it in another couple of chapters, and I'm glad the Dementor connection makes it feel creepy for you. A patronus to help cure Bill is a very interesting idea. Who knows all the additional uses patronuses might have being as magical and person specific as they are! But here again, I cannot comment on where the story will go except to say that there will be some twists and turns yet to come - and I hadn't thought of patronuses when I wrote them! Oh well, maybe one day YOU'LL write a story that I can come to read.
Thanks again for your remarks. They are always appreciated and greatly enjoyed. Report Review
I want that. I want that bad.Author's Response: Glad you think so! Thanks for mentioning it, and I hope you enjoy more of the story. Report Review
An Outstanding beginning of the new term. I am surprised that some others from the Trios year aren't back. Any that were Muggleborn, or Half would have been kicked out of school, like Dean Thomas and Justin. I look forward to your next. Having Dumbledores portrait present was a stroke of Genius. I also suspect that the new DADA professor, just might be the one that will help Bill with his curse.
FoMAuthor's Response: Yes, it stands to reason that some students would have been ousted from school or gone into hiding with their families, but Deathly Hallows gives very little information about it. For the purpose of my own story, I preferred not to address those unknown details since they don't play a role in my own story plot, which mainly focuses on the Foursome and their challenges.
Dumbledore's start of term announcements was always one of my favorite scenes from the books. Someone else doing it just wouldn't feel the same. I just thought it would be a fitting tradition for Dumbledore to keep doing it, and there was no reason why he still couldn't! I'm glad you agree.
I won't comment about the new DADA instructor, but it was interesting to read that you've already got a tentative opinion about him. You'll meet him a little more in the next chapter as the Foursome attend one of his classes. Thanks for you comments. They're always great fun to read.
Oh my. What happened to Bill was worse than I ever imagined. There must be a wayto help him. If there is a countercurse, I agree with Ron, Hermione will find it. I must go on.
FoMAuthor's Response: I'm glad to hear you say the problem was worse than you expected. I thought a werewolf-related problem might be a bit cliche, so I tried to give it an interesting new twist from a sinister dark angle. Hope you enjoy. Report Review
Another fine chapter. I will let you know that the year Harry turned 18, his birthday was on a Friday, not Saturday. (Let me say you can search engine anything). I may have to reread this, but Harry lost his broom the night he left Privet Drive. Other wise I am enjoying watching Harry get use to life after the battle. I can wait to read the next.
PS If I haven't before I must tell you how much I love the Hogwarts painting. The magical properties are outstanding! I choked up at the sight of Hedwig communicating with Harry on his birthday.Author's Response: Hi, it's nice to hear from you again. I always enjoy reading all of your comments. You're right about Harry's birthday. I used a real calender to write this story and just double checked it to see that I read the day of the week wrong even with the calender right in front of me! Aaargh! Thanks for pointing it out.
We did already exchange comments about Harry's broom n another review. It got me curious myself to reread that part in the book. When I rechecked, I found the wording about the broom rather vague. There's only one phrase about it that would be really easy to miss in the chaos of the motorbike scene. It just says something like the broom spun, but it never actually says that it spun out of the motorbike and fell, although that seems to be the implied meaning. I also don't remember Harry ever lamenting the loss of the broom in the original books, which seems a bit odd if the broom was lost. You would think there would be some portrayal of him being upset by the loss of a treasured possession, but I don't think it's ever even mentioned afterward and I don't remember Harry ever expressing a bit of concern about it. In any case, I wanted Harry to have his Firebolt for my own story, whether it's canon or not.
I'm glad to hear you're enjoying the magic of the Hogwarts painting, and that Hedwig's presence in it touched one of your heartstrings. I hope you'll continue to enjoy the rest.
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