Oh this is so sweet, it sucks that they fell out, and there's not much slash yet..but I love it anyway. One thing, I think that when you talk about drugs you should make up some magical ones because them using muggle ones seems unbelieveable. I love where this is going, can;t wait for next chapter! We gonna see some more Marlene?!Author's Response: I nkow about that part with the drugs, thought of it myself but was too lazy to go back and edit it, because I'd have to explain it in a way that would feel connectable to teh actual drugs we use in the real world... and was too busy to do that because of all the squeezing my brains for the plot... :D I usually edit things like that in the end. Thanks for pointing it out though, its always better to know the little things that jump out of 'character' for the story.
Yeah, of course we're going to see more of Marlene, but its going to be mostly through flashbacks and Lily's reminiscence of her friend as she realizes the depth of her feelings.
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Aw! James is so sweet! I feel so so so bad for Lily, and I hope Marlene doesn't die. James doing her homework is just aw, and I'm stuck wondering-will Marlene LIVE? brb, next chapter!Author's Response: Of course that Marlene will live! ...Or won't she? Ok Im not so sure yet, it depends on what mood Im in when i get to that point. Im not saying anythign now since I have a real nice talent for killing off my characters right when they're interesting. ;)
I love writing James, he's such a challenge but I like how he almost pines over Lily and is angry at her at the same time. Report Review
I love this, I love the whole 'Lily-In-The-War' thing, I espcially like that Marlene's in a coma atm (i'm horrible) because if this is going to be as slashy as I hope then this should be beautifully angsty. I'm off to read the next chapter now :DAuthor's Response: Hi! Im glad that you like the plot here, since its going to be a big part of the story. I wanted to draw a ppicture of Lily's changes through what happesnt to her with Marlene. Yeah, ;P its going to be pretty angsty because of the situation right now, and Im going to stop the story right before they actually join the war. Report Review
Oh, my goodness, I just realized that I didn't leave a review last time. SORRY.
I love this story. It's amazing. I love your writing style especially. The plot is good (so far), and I like the twist of Marlene (maybe) being gay. I also really, really like the way you portray the characters. Thank you so much for writing this - please update soon!Author's Response: Hello! Im so happy that you like this story! When i started writing it i really had no idead where i was going with it, but now I do. I've been editing and the more i re-read, the more it felt like there was some serious work to be done. I havent written any James-Lily centric stories before, so this is new to me, but Ill try to keep it original. I have another chapter almost finished and I hope that you like that one too!
Thank you for your awsome review! Report Review
I like how you have James acting. It would explain how she fell in love with him. I think this is a good story. I can not wait fort he next chapter of it so i can find out more.Author's Response: Hi! My first reviewer, hurray!!!
A big part of the story is going to be based around how James acts round Lily and another part on how Lily perceves his actions. Im going to try and make them fall in love and have the whole thing look real... that is my hope anyway. Im glad that you like my characterisation of him and the story so far! The second chapter is in que and should be out in a couple of days.
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