I like your story so far but you should get a beta (I think that's what they are called) cause there are some mistakes and beta's usually help your story..become stronger? I guess you can say. You forgot to add question marks when someone asks a question. Just like to point it out so you can look over it and fix it. Also, you should add commas now and then so the sentences aren't too messy; for example: "Daddy, what's happening? Who is trying to hurt Harry?" And sometimes your sentences start with lower cases (Which it shouldn't since you should always capitalized your sentences) and needs to have periods at the end; I think that's all the mistakes; other then that, your story is good. Just need to go back and look it over. You should keep the beta idea in mind, it always a good idea and it would help you out with your story. Now onto the next chapter for me. (:

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AW x1000! I was wondering what happened to Remus!

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REMUS!!! You added my favorite character to my favorite story! Keep up the excellent work, and remeber to enjoy what your writing should be fun and show your characteristics.

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AMAZINGLY AMAZING!!! Can't wait for more! This is my all time fave story!

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mucho awesome! i need more charlie and rose

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great! even better than great this is fantastic!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, glad you like it! I'm working on the next chapter so hopefully will have that up soon.

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hurry up! ive been waiting for 2 minutes

Author's Response: Im so sorry it been so long (bit more than 2 minutes) my computer has completely crashed and after ages it has finally came back for being fixed. :(

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i love this story it makes me want to read more.cant wait to read more of it :')

Author's Response: Thank you
i'm hoping to have the next chapter with you soon :D
thanks for reviewing :)

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this is one of my favorite stories i have read for a older hp sibling update:D

Author's Response: thank you!
i working on the next chapter at the moment so hopefully i can have it up soon :D

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i love this whole story update please:D

Author's Response: thank you i put the next chapter in for validation a couple of days ago so hopefully it should be up soon :D

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What a sad day for poor little Rose (but had to be included to make the story complete). Another good chapter and I await your update. 10/10, please update soon.

Author's Response: thank you for reviewing sorry the next one has taken so long but ive been away but im just about to put it in for validation now :)

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this was a good chapter who is emma

keep writing this is a good story

Author's Response: its her godmother thats why she's with her but i decided to shorten her name she in it at the beginging. Thanks for reviewing :)

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so when is the next chapter coming up or are you done

Author's Response: The next chapter in awaiting validation and i'm not done yet still lots more to come :)

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that was worth the wait best one ever

Author's Response: thank you :)

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Poor little Rose, it'll be ten years before she see's little Harry again. An excellent chapter and 10/10. Please update soon.

Author's Response: thank you for reviewing, i will try and get the next chapter up asap :)

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im am sorry for my last commat but you keep ending at the good part it like it getting really good and it like you don't have the next chapter up

Author's Response: the next chapter is waiting validation its longer that the others about twice the size although that probably means i'm talking nonsense. Thank you for reviewing :)

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Duh duh duh. Cliffie. Another great chapter, I await your next chapter with much eagerness. So please update very very soon. 10/10.

Author's Response: than you, next chapter should be with you shortly.

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What a sad chapter, and poor Rose what alot for her to take in. Another great chapter, 10/10 and please update soon.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing again, the next chapter is waiting to be validated.

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meanie you should have continue it

Author's Response: sorry i hope you like it though. Thanks for reviewing.

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I knew Harry would make an appearance (it wouldn't be the same without him). Another good chapter. 10/10 and please update soon.

Author's Response: Thank you for your reviews, much appreciated. Of course Harry would come up at some point, the next chapter is nearly done.

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Will Harry be making an appearance? I ask myself. 9/10 and now for the next chapter.

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I like the start to this story. I know you mentioned Rose in your summary, but I was expecting Harry first then Rose after him. 9/10 for your opener and onto the next chapter.

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